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While retaking Europe an allied soldier finds a book with invaluable secrets that lead him on a worldwide treasure hunt where powerful opponents will stop at nothing to have it all for themselves.
Examples: “When reclaiming the Nazi Camelot during WWII” “an allied soldier sets out on a worldwide treasure hunt” “an allied soldier finds himself up against a megalomaniac US general” “following clues from a looted ancient Dead Sea copper scroll” Baddie's goal: Nazis need the treasure to birth theRead more
Examples:
“When reclaiming the Nazi Camelot during WWII”
“an allied soldier sets out on a worldwide treasure hunt”
“an allied soldier finds himself up against a megalomaniac US general”
“following clues from a looted ancient Dead Sea copper scroll”
Baddie’s goal: Nazis need the treasure to birth the Fourth Reich.
This is your story, make these yours; hope you find these examples helpful.
See lessWhen his sister is taken, a rule-loving fiddler crab breaks out of his shell and dives claw first into a global climate crisis to save her.
A like the idea of an animated family adventure involving a timely issue like the global climate crisis so you've got a great hook. I think a bit more detail could strengthen the logline. I'd clarify how or by who the sister crab gets taken and how the protagonist crab "breaks out of his shell" to sRead more
A like the idea of an animated family adventure involving a timely issue like the global climate crisis so you’ve got a great hook. I think a bit more detail could strengthen the logline. I’d clarify how or by who the sister crab gets taken and how the protagonist crab “breaks out of his shell” to save her. Something to help visualize the story more. Overall, I like what’s here.
See lessA presumed dead father explains to his son the connection between his dreams and heaven.
"A father" = protagonist " presumed dead" = inciting incident " explains to his son the connection between his dreams and heaven" = main character goal A father is archetypal, an emotionally powerful relationship bridging generation and ensuring genetic immortality. " presumed dead" is evocative, buRead more
“A father” = protagonist
” presumed dead” = inciting incident
” explains to his son the connection between his dreams and heaven” = main character goal
A father is archetypal, an emotionally powerful relationship bridging generation and ensuring genetic immortality. ” presumed dead” is evocative, but vague. Who caused the death, the son? Was it an accident or … murder!?
While a philosophical debate about heaven’s relationship to dreams may engage some audiences (I for one certainly believe dream work is a valuable tool for story development), it lacks tangibility. In particular, the Adventure genre is very ‘physical’, outwardly moving toward a clear and material goal. The hero must get the Witch’s broom, the police Chief must kill the man eating shark, Batman must capture the Joker, etc …. you get the picture.
Perhaps a McGuffin resides in heaven/dream land, that must be stolen by a hero, to win back his son’s love … just riffing ideas!
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