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When a redneck American world champion woodchopper is defeated by the ultimate bogan Australian newcomer, he travels to the land down under to face his nemesis and reclaim the title.
Why not combining Foxtrot and Tony Edward comments, the hero is an outlier from the world of wood chopping, maybe an arrogant well educated waspish who makes a living out of the competition. You would be surprise by the number of people who applies to non-standard sports when they realise that theirRead more
Why not combining Foxtrot and Tony Edward comments, the hero is an outlier from the world of wood chopping, maybe an arrogant well educated waspish who makes a living out of the competition. You would be surprise by the number of people who applies to non-standard sports when they realise that their path is blocked in the usual sport (Most bobsleigh sport person are failed sprinters).
See lessHis opponent is a young woman whom he is attracted to and in the same time very competitive with. She needs the money to save her farm down under. He wants to win, because he needs to keep his sponsors happy.
Rivalry and courtship at the same time.
Remember the movie “What women want” with Mel Hibson and Helen Hunt but in the competitive wood chopping world rather than the advertising world.
Owner and his telepathically connected dog, impress every one they meet, and take the show on the road to financial independence.
Spike2018, You wrote "...Is paying off gambling debts an inciting incident? Or do I need to be more specific like: Exorbitant Super Bowl losses?" No, paying off debts is a series of actions, not an incident, it's also something that the main character does himself - on his own accord. In previous thRead more
Spike2018,
You wrote “…Is paying off gambling debts an inciting incident? Or do I need to be more specific like: Exorbitant Super Bowl losses?”
No, paying off debts is a series of actions, not an incident, it’s also something that the main character does himself – on his own accord. In previous threads I explained, in detail, what makes a good inciting incident, here it is again – A good inciting incident is a single, out of the ordinary, and motivating event that was initiated by an external force to the main character.
If I were to convert your above suggestion into an inciting incident it would probably look like this:
After a bookie cracks his thumb, a lowner, telepathically connected to his dog, goes on the road…
As Richiev wrote, where is the conflict going to come from? If he’s on the road, well, he’s on the road doing his thing – not much to it. What If the bookie were to pursue him? Then you have a source of conflict.
See lessSpike a shy, autistic football genius finds a teams playbook, easily memorizes it, then morphs into a gregarious man about town while helping the head coach win the big game
As stated by previous reviewers, this Logline is a mess. Moreover I don't think that as describe the motivation to hire your autistic character makes sense. To me it would make more sense if the playbook is lost or destroyed during the head coach accident. When the substitute coach realises that theRead more
As stated by previous reviewers, this Logline is a mess. Moreover I don’t think that as describe the motivation to hire your autistic character makes sense. To me it would make more sense if the playbook is lost or destroyed during the head coach accident. When the substitute coach realises that the autistic character has memorised the entire playbook, then it makes sense to hire him and try to integrate him into the coaching staff.
When an autistic football savant is hired to help a newly appointed football head coach, he must convince both his family, doctors and sceptic players of his ability to avoid being permanently committed.
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