1. Posted: November 1, 2017In:

    A small town reporter tells a little white-lie to boost his ego and it snowballs out of controll. He must now make that lie a reality or be shamed out of town.

    spike2018 Logliner

    Agree with the other reviews. The first thing that caught my eye was little white lie.? If it were in quotation marks, it might give? it a larger significance, ?meaning it might actually be a larger lie and the?reader will wonder what it really is.?I like the concept and can immediately relate to thRead more

    Agree with the other reviews. The first thing that caught my eye was little white lie.? If it were in quotation marks, it might give? it a larger significance, ?meaning it might actually be a larger lie and the?reader will wonder what it really is.?I like the concept and can immediately relate to the story. What if he told the lie to a specific person he thought he could trust and they can’t hold a secret?? As word gets out about the big lie than the challenge becomes even greater and maybe even more fun.

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  2. Posted: February 14, 2018In:

    Logline: Spike an affable, autistic football genius helps a team win its first super Bowl. Concept: Spike and his older brother Bradley traverse through the city causing an uproar all while Spike is preparing the head coach to win the Super Bowl.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    There is a story in there somewhere. Look at the want and needs of the people involved. How does he get to the coach? Why and how are they causing havoc? Why are these related?

    There is a story in there somewhere. Look at the want and needs of the people involved.

    How does he get to the coach?
    Why and how are they causing havoc?
    Why are these related?

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  3. Posted: February 13, 2018In:

    After a fluke undercover drug bust saves their jobs, repairs the department?s damaged reputation and turns them into unlikely heroes, two sleazy and morally bankrupt city cops are targeted by the dangerous drug syndicate they accidentally swindled.

    dpg Singularity

    >>>targeted by the dangerous drug syndicate they accidentally swindled.The logline unintentionally but? nonetheless essentially frames the (head of) the drug syndicate as the protagonist because it gives him an overarching objective goal in response to the inciting incident of the cop caperRead more

    >>>targeted by the dangerous drug syndicate they accidentally swindled.

    The logline unintentionally but? nonetheless essentially frames the (head of) the drug syndicate as the protagonist because it gives him an overarching objective goal in response to the inciting incident of the cop caper while giving no overarching objective goal to the cops.

    If the cops are the protagonists, then the logline needs to frame a plot? in terms of their objective goal? — not that of the syndicate.

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