1. Posted: February 6, 2018In:

    After his egg family joins the “high class vegetarians”–due to his proposed thesis–Scrambled Jr. must resolve the growing vengeance of non-vegetables towards the privileges of being a vegetable

    Richiev Singularity

    You shouldn't use a thesis as your inciting incident. What specific even sets your lead character into motion? What must your lead character do? What is standing in his way? Why would an egg become a high-class vegetarian?

    You shouldn’t use a thesis as your inciting incident.

    What specific even sets your lead character into motion?
    What must your lead character do?
    What is standing in his way?

    Why would an egg become a high-class vegetarian?

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  2. Posted: January 29, 2018In:

    A ruined indie scriptwriter decides to crash in a plane against the Hollywood sign. At the last moment he repents and jumps out of the plane. He falls into the pool of a mansion and inside discovers a famous writer of commercial success dead, he immediately decides to take advantage of his name

    dpg Singularity

    >>>>?I have to know more about the business in Hollywood before trying to write something like this, Write it after you sell your script about the kid who forms the club to get revenge? on the bullies.? Then you'll be on the inside, know how the business operates. >>The agent couldRead more

    >>>>?I have to know more about the business in Hollywood before trying to write something like this,

    Write it after you sell your script about the kid who forms the club to get revenge? on the bullies.? Then you’ll be on the inside, know how the business operates.

    >>The agent could be the one who has the idea of impersonating his dead client.

    Because the deceased recluse writer was the agent’s meal ticket, the only money making client he had.? The agent is a failure, too.? Which makes him desperate enough to go along with the ruse.

    fwiw

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  3. Posted: January 24, 2018In:

    When he falls in love with a writer and her amazing script, a con-artist poses as a producer while avoiding the people he swindled to turn the script into a film that will make more than any of his scams.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    "...will make more than any of his scams." -- make more what, exactly? Cash? If he falls in love with her, his next move wouldn't be to scam her, now would it? The best stories seem to? be between the relationship of the characters. Always know who your main character is so that you can promote theRead more

    “…will make more than any of his scams.” — make more what, exactly? Cash?

    If he falls in love with her, his next move wouldn’t be to scam her, now would it?

    The best stories seem to? be between the relationship of the characters. Always know who your main character is so that you can promote the story accordingly.

    Here is my version with the con-artist as the M.C.:

    A man poses as a producer to con a writer out of her script yet struggles to complete the task after he completely falls in love with her.

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