1. Posted: June 23, 2017In:

    When a young Latina, Izel Madrid, finds out she descends from Aztec gods, she decides to join forces with the charmingly surly, shapeshifting detective, Elias Navarro, in order to fight supernatural crime and find out the truth about her lineage.

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    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Agreed with the above, she needs a definitive event which motivates her to team up with the detective.?Currently this sounds like a series more than a film, if this is the case, the logline needs to serve a different purpose. Assuming it's a film she could be implicated in a murder, or been involvedRead more

    Agreed with the above, she needs a definitive event which motivates her to team up with the detective.?Currently this sounds like a series more than a film, if this is the case, the logline needs to serve a different purpose. Assuming it’s a film she could be implicated in a murder, or been involved in a crime the detective is working on but her story does need a starting point. Secondly, her goal is unclear. What does “…find out the truth about her lineage…” in practical terms? Does it mean she wants to find her living relatives or debunk a myth? Whatever it is that drives her throughout her story, it needs to be clarified.

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  2. Posted: May 20, 2017In:

    When a Goth Detective is tasked with solving a murder at a very optimistic circus, he must solve the case to be able to escape the happiness.

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    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter

    But why Goth? Wouldn't it be better to identify with something else about tbis guy? Otherwise, this reads way better. Gj.

    But why Goth? Wouldn’t it be better to identify with something else about tbis guy?

    Otherwise, this reads way better. Gj.

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  3. Posted: May 17, 2017In:

    When they plot to kill each other the following day, a white supremacist and a black racist rather wake up in each other’s body and must team up and solve the problem or get killed by their gang members.

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    hihello8484 Logliner

    Thanks so much Brothers for your insightful reviews. Very much appreciated.

    Thanks so much Brothers for your insightful reviews. Very much appreciated.

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