1. Posted: May 3, 2017In:

    Two sleazy disgraceful cops become unlikely heroes in their last-ditch effort to save their jobs and the damaged reputation of their department by vowing to take down a powerful drug and sex trafficking operation they?re steady customers of.

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    An original ?issue remains; ?why should an audience care? ?Why should they want them to succeed?Given the negative image of the police in the USA, what can you say about them that would give an audience a reason to be on their side, to root for them? ?They deserve to be fired -- heck, tried, convictRead more

    An original ?issue remains; ?why should an audience care? ?Why should they want them to succeed?

    Given the negative image of the police in the USA, what can you say about them that would give an audience a reason to be on their side, to root for them? ?They deserve to be fired — heck, tried, convicted and sentenced to jail for the violations of the law, abuse of authority. ?They are ?outlaws, scoundrels.

    What is their implied character arc?

    Or do wish to portray them as rogues who by pulling off some 3rd Act heroics are able to get away with their abuses, don’t have to fess up to their misdeeds, don’t have pay for their crimes?

    What dramatic theme are you exploring with these rogue cops, anyway?

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  2. Posted: April 30, 2017In:

    Thirty five year old toy designer John who hates kids gets a chance to design toys for one of the best toy manufacturing company under the super vision of four year old Sara.

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    The logline sets up an interesting situation for the adult character -- but fails to give to him a plot, There is no indication where the story is going to go with the setup.Given the situation he finds himself in, what must ?he about it? ? Or else -- what are the stakes?If he's the protagonist thenRead more

    The logline sets up an interesting situation for the adult character — but fails to give to him a plot, There is no indication where the story is going to go with the setup.

    Given the situation he finds himself in, what must ?he about it? ? Or else — what are the stakes?

    If he’s the protagonist then he needs to have a proactive role in pursuit of an objective goal. ?What is that goal?

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  3. Posted: May 1, 2017In:

    When his grandmother sets him up with a man they?ve just met, an architect must decide between a loveless relationship and reinventing himself to complete The Playground and reclaim himself ? and the man he loves.

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    Agree with Nir Shelter that in the romance genre there's got to be a seemingly insuperable obstacle that stands in the way of true love. ?In this case, the obstacle appears to be internal. But film is a visual medium so all internal conflicts and obstacles must be shown ?-- there has to be an externRead more

    Agree with Nir Shelter that in the romance genre there’s got to be a seemingly insuperable obstacle that stands in the way of true love. ?In this case, the obstacle appears to be internal.

    But film is a visual medium so all internal conflicts and obstacles must be shown ?– there has to be an external representation of the obstacle. The indecisiveness is not the problem; it’s a a symptom of the deeper problem, the obstacle. What is that obstacle?

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