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It?s the tail-end of the hair band era, but four friends from Jersey don?t know that yet, and their band is riding the wave of a surprise hit single. All that stands between them and their dreams of gold and platinum are a cross-country road-trip to L.A., strange venues, hostile audiences, and a label suit with an axe to grind, hellbent on seeing them fail.
solidjim:This is your 5th iteration of the ?premise of a struggling band. ?So I'm guessing the premise has a strong appeal to you; there's some emotional bait that has got you hooked. ?What ?is it? ?What do you feel is the emotional hook in this story? ?What do you feel your story has to offer thatRead more
solidjim:
This is your 5th iteration of the ?premise of a struggling band. ?So I’m guessing the premise has a strong appeal to you; there’s some emotional bait that has got you hooked. ?What ?is it? ?What do you feel is the emotional hook in this story? ?What do you feel your story has to offer that would make for a ?new twist on the all-too familiar subject of bands and performers trying to breakthrough in a cut-throat business?
See lessIn 1990 a hapless hair metal band must make their way to Los Angeles for their chance at rock n roll stardom but a weaselly label exec and hot new music fads stand in their way.
I would just mention 90s or early 90s, unless the specific year matters. If your story has a leader or protagonist, I would have the logline center on his/her leadership qualities dependent on the success of the band's mission. Also, reconsider the hot new music part as well. How can that be an antaRead more
I would just mention 90s or early 90s, unless the specific year matters. If your story has a leader or protagonist, I would have the logline center on his/her leadership qualities dependent on the success of the band’s mission. Also, reconsider the hot new music part as well. How can that be an antagonistic element?
See lessWhen faced with the agony of getting jobs after graduation, a hapless hair metal band goes on the road trip from hell for a shot at a huge record deal but a jaded former classmate works for the label and will stop at nothing to see them flop.
Why MUST they get a record deal? Most bands and musicians want a record deal, what is different about this band that makes their story of getting a record deal worth telling? In other words, what is the specific event that motivates them to take action in order to get the record deal? Secondly, whatRead more
Why MUST they get a record deal? Most bands and musicians want a record deal, what is different about this band that makes their story of getting a record deal worth telling? In other words, what is the specific event that motivates them to take action in order to get the record deal?
Secondly, what is at stake? So what if they don’t get the deal, what’s the worst that will happen? Much like many other bands they’ll all get jobs and move on with their lives?
The jaded classmate can be cut, he isn’t presenting any SPECIFIC obstacles in the logline – “…will stop at nothing…” means nothing, as it doesn’t describe and specific event or action. However, if he were to be in a rival band who are also targeting a record deal with the same label then the obstacle is made clear.
For example:
After their lead singer is diagnosed with throat cancer, a metal band have one a month to score a record deal before he loses his voice forever.
This isn’t very good but it illustrates the idea that as a result of a single event the main characters became motivated to take action in pursuit of a single goal. You could make it terminal cancer so he will die instead of just lose his voice and the same applies only a bit more morbid.
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