Hi tony18,

While you have a clearly defined goal for your protagonist and a big conflict here, I see several areas of improvement:
1. “A record producer” is not very descriptive. This is an excellent opportunity to give our hero a modifier that will create a nice juxtaposition to enrich the conflict and clarify the stakes, a.k.a. the tangible consequences for the hero and why we would care. For example, consider making him weary, rundown, or overly critical…something that hints toward why the goal is especially hard for this character to attain / how he’s ill-equipped in some way in the beginning of the story to achieve his goal.
2. The conflict itself revolves around the time-span, and while one day is short, would that goal be even realistic for the record producer to achieve if the girl has no talent? I guess not, so I assume she has mad talent and the attempt to “doll her up” doesn’t seem very compelling nor very formidable an obstacle to me to fill a feature lengths screenplay.
3. The stakes should be made very clear. Why is it so important to the record producer to achieve this goal, and why is it important to the girl? Is the record-producer about to go broke? Is it the daughter of some woman he’s madly in love with and this is the only way to win her heart? You get the idea. When they fail to make the girl shine, there must be terrible consequences attached to at least one, if not either party for an audience to care.

Hope this helps and good luck,
BeeZeeBee