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When humanity decides to commit planetary suicide to escape the woes of post-apocalyptic life, a team is assembled to infiltrate and defeat the terrorist militia group standing in the way of nuclear self-annihilation.
I get this in a “The Dead Don’t Die” dark humor kind of way and DIG IT. Your right this is a fun one, I workshopped your elements then tried to add humor; I am sure DPG will tell me if I got it right or not 😉 (big fan brother!) Added focus to the vastness of Humanity, leaning towards: “Being done wiRead more
I get this in a “The Dead Don’t Die” dark humor kind of way and DIG IT. Your right this is a fun one, I workshopped your elements then tried to add humor; I am sure DPG will tell me if I got it right or not 😉 (big fan brother!)
Added focus to the vastness of Humanity, leaning towards:
“Being done with post-apocoliptia NATO seeks the help of an ex-zombie hunter to kill the “terrorists” standing in the way of nuclear self-annihilation”
Take care.
See lessCan a simple minded accountant, even outwit a butterfly, let alone learn something, when he attends a day long workshop on pet zombie care, given by a snide mysterious intellectual snob.
If the lead character is smart enough to be an accountant I am sure he is capable of doing a one day workshop on zombie wrangling. 1: Your character should have a dream or goal which makes this class important to him. Maybe he has always dreamed of being a zombie wrangler. 2: Your story should haveRead more
If the lead character is smart enough to be an accountant
I am sure he is capable of doing a one day workshop on zombie wrangling.
1: Your character should have a dream or goal which makes this class important to him. Maybe he has always dreamed of being a zombie wrangler.
2: Your story should have recognizable stakes. If he fails what he will lose? Will he… a. get fired, b. fail to reach his dream, c. Be eaten by zombies? What are the stakes?
3: I would avoid writing loglines in the form of a question.
This idea is different, a series of pieces I have not seen put together in this particular way before. Forrest Gump meets the Walking Dead.
So the story is original but I think you might give the logline another try.
See lessA woman want to relive high school days so she wants to come back to her high school to help a student get revenge on the clique who wronged her.
Why does the main character want to relive her high school days? - Her life must have been downhill after she left high school. Maybe use a few words in your logline to convey this: A recently divorced ex-trophy wife desperate to relive her high school days... A 15 year waitress who just can't takeRead more
Why does the main character want to relive her high school days?
– Her life must have been downhill after she left high school. Maybe use a few words in your logline to convey this: A recently divorced ex-trophy wife desperate to relive her high school days…
A 15 year waitress who just can’t take anymore of her dead-end job decides to go back to the time when she was happiest: high school.
In what capacity does she come back to high school?
– Does she come back as a teacher, a coach, a volunteer coach, a student trying to complete high school/GED requirements? Does she just lurk the halls and sit in on classes so that she can have that high school experience. If so, what triggers this? What is the inciting incident?
Why does she help a random student get revenge on a clique that wronged her?
– Does the MC recognize a part of herself inside that student?
– Is the MC desperate for friendship?
Example logline:
After 15 years waitressing in a dead-end job, a high school drop-out has had enough and decides to reinroll at the local high school to earn a diploma and relive her glory days. Desperate for friendship and high school drama, she becomes involved in helping a classmate get revenge on a clique of popular girls.
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