1. Posted: February 20, 2019In:

    When a deceitful cult leader?s doomsday prophecy comes true, his followers refuse to believe he?s not a prophet, despite his panicked confession, forcing him to take responsibility and find refuge for them all before the asteroid strikes.

    Mike Pedley Singularity

    I like the premise for this but I think it's worded in a slightly confusing way. I've got to ask though... why is he forced to take responsibility? Why doesn't he just run away? He's deceitful - why not a coward too? I feel like I need more to understand his motives for sticking around. Hope this heRead more

    I like the premise for this but I think it’s worded in a slightly confusing way.

    I’ve got to ask though… why is he forced to take responsibility? Why doesn’t he just run away? He’s deceitful – why not a coward too? I feel like I need more to understand his motives for sticking around.

    Hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: February 19, 2019In:

    A young wife seeks revenge after catching her husband cheating, and with the help of her eccentric friends, creates an online business that names and shames unfaithful men.

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    ExpressJules Penpusher

    Thanks all for your feedback. I have written a synopsis that goes into depth about these questions, but it's more about learning how to distill it in less than 60 words. These websites already exist, but the movie is really about the protagonist gaining confidence and new friendships... The husbandRead more

    Thanks all for your feedback.

    I have written a synopsis that goes into depth about these questions, but it’s more about learning how to distill it in less than 60 words. These websites already exist, but the movie is really about the protagonist gaining confidence and new friendships… The husband cheated with her best friend and as a result, her entire network of those close to her is lost. Her confidence is regained with the new friends and she does find a new love interest in the end …

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  3. Posted: February 16, 2019In:

    After dropping his wedding band in a wishing well, a dissatisfied middle-aged husband discovers he can experience life if he hadn?t got married simply by removing his wedding ring, but must choose which life to lead when his ring?s power begins to fade.

    Richiev Singularity

    You have a strong hook but not a strong inciting incident. You need a specific scene at the beginning of the story that establishes the problems in his marriage. Then introduce the hook about the Wishing well. So nice hook, but you need to establish the problem in a more compelling way.

    You have a strong hook but not a strong inciting incident.
    You need a specific scene at the beginning of the story that establishes the problems in his marriage.
    Then introduce the hook about the Wishing well.

    So nice hook, but you need to establish the problem in a more compelling way.

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