1. Posted: February 14, 2019In:

    When financial instability forces him to teach English to immigrants, a heartbroken, over-imaginative New Yorker must help a ragtag bunch of foreigners pass the class or risk losing what little he has left.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Agreed with all the above. Also, the stakes are unclear, or not specific. What does lose what little he has left mean in practical terms? Lose his house? His car? His mind?

    Agreed with all the above.

    Also, the stakes are unclear, or not specific. What does lose what little he has left mean in practical terms? Lose his house? His car? His mind?

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  2. Posted: February 7, 2019In:

    With the Wild imagination that Chase Jones has, even he is surprised to be teaching ESL to a group of cocky, confident, sexy, funny, and all around goofy set of Immigrants who at all cost must pass the class, or risk being deported from the United States.

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    Christopherandre25 Logliner

    Richiv and Mikepedley85 Thank you both very much for your feedback! I will use that ... It has to do with financial?instability but It's not about xenophobe so I will figure out a good angle. that works into the story

    Richiv and Mikepedley85 Thank you both very much for your feedback! I will use that … It has to do with financial?instability but It’s not about xenophobe so I will figure out a good angle. that works into the story

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  3. Posted: January 30, 2019In:

    When an article about a genetically abnormal blue watermelon surfaces, the world’s most misunderstood (and only) super-villain goes on a journey to find it and prove his humanity before the FBI resorts to drastic measures to stop him once and for all.

    Richiev Singularity

    I am confused? how does finding a blue watermelon prove your lead character's humanity?

    I am confused? how does finding a blue watermelon prove your lead character’s humanity?

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