1. Posted: February 19, 2019In:

    A young wife seeks revenge after catching her husband cheating, and with the help of her eccentric friends, creates an online business that names and shames unfaithful men.

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    ExpressJules Penpusher

    Thanks all for your feedback. I have written a synopsis that goes into depth about these questions, but it's more about learning how to distill it in less than 60 words. These websites already exist, but the movie is really about the protagonist gaining confidence and new friendships... The husbandRead more

    Thanks all for your feedback.

    I have written a synopsis that goes into depth about these questions, but it’s more about learning how to distill it in less than 60 words. These websites already exist, but the movie is really about the protagonist gaining confidence and new friendships… The husband cheated with her best friend and as a result, her entire network of those close to her is lost. Her confidence is regained with the new friends and she does find a new love interest in the end …

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  2. Posted: February 16, 2019In:

    After dropping his wedding band in a wishing well, a dissatisfied middle-aged husband discovers he can experience life if he hadn?t got married simply by removing his wedding ring, but must choose which life to lead when his ring?s power begins to fade.

    Richiev Singularity

    You have a strong hook but not a strong inciting incident. You need a specific scene at the beginning of the story that establishes the problems in his marriage. Then introduce the hook about the Wishing well. So nice hook, but you need to establish the problem in a more compelling way.

    You have a strong hook but not a strong inciting incident.
    You need a specific scene at the beginning of the story that establishes the problems in his marriage.
    Then introduce the hook about the Wishing well.

    So nice hook, but you need to establish the problem in a more compelling way.

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  3. Posted: February 14, 2019In:

    When financial instability forces him to teach English to immigrants, a heartbroken, over-imaginative New Yorker must help a ragtag bunch of foreigners pass the class or risk losing what little he has left.

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Agreed with all the above. Also, the stakes are unclear, or not specific. What does lose what little he has left mean in practical terms? Lose his house? His car? His mind?

    Agreed with all the above.

    Also, the stakes are unclear, or not specific. What does lose what little he has left mean in practical terms? Lose his house? His car? His mind?

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