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When an exiled gangster turned priest discovers that his mother is dying, he must make peace with his ex partner in crime in order to return home.
Hmm.? If the priest's objective goal is to visit his mother, what is his subjective need for doing so? (Subjective needs are not usually explicitly stated in a logline, but it strengthens the logline when the subjective need is implicit.)
Hmm.? If the priest’s objective goal is to visit his mother, what is his subjective need for doing so? (Subjective needs are not usually explicitly stated in a logline, but it strengthens the logline when the subjective need is implicit.)
See lessIn order to say goodbye to his dying mother, an exiled gangster turned priest must finally face his past.
That's a good first half of a logline, but you stop right when things get interesting -- Tell us what he must do, what he must overcome in order to say goodbye to his mother. The stakes are clear, as is some urgency with the ticking clock of her imminent death. There's also some great irony in a ganRead more
That’s a good first half of a logline, but you stop right when things get interesting — Tell us what he must do, what he must overcome in order to say goodbye to his mother. The stakes are clear, as is some urgency with the ticking clock of her imminent death. There’s also some great irony in a gangster turned priest, we’re just missing that last element so we can accurately see this movie in our mind.
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Good rough draft rewrite by yqwertz.? There has to be something obvious at stake for the main character.
Good rough draft rewrite by yqwertz.? There has to be something obvious at stake for the main character.
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