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James son of the king of the Tree-GLow Kingdom, is called to save the kingdom of a dragon. He has to defend it for his family and the kingdom fighting with the wisdom of the Esential Gems.
Hi, I like we’re you’re heading with the story. I get it’s a fantasy, and a kingdom that needs saved. However, there are some parts that are missing and hard to understand. After reading your summary it was a little clearer. This site has a Logline formula I recommend using or this helps me as well.Read more
Hi,
See lessI like we’re you’re heading with the story. I get it’s a fantasy, and a kingdom that needs saved. However, there are some parts that are missing and hard to understand. After reading your summary it was a little clearer. This site has a Logline formula I recommend using or this helps me as well.
Protagonist + inciting incident + central conflict + protagonist goal.
Does not have to be in that exact order, but it ensures you get those main elements in the logline.
Here is my example
When a evil dragon threatens a kingdom, a skittish prince must defeat it before it gains ultimate power and destroy’s everything in its path.
You want to simplify it and get to the point. Don’t use specific names. The rules or the backstory is not known so it has to understandable for everyone. See what works for you then go from there. I hope this helps. Keep up the hard work.
After being bullied because of her autism, a misunderstood college student joins a secret sorority group of girls only to find out she has a kill a fellow student.
The only movie that comes to my mind when I hear about a protagonist who MUST kill someone against their will is "The Killing of a Chinese Bookie" by John Cassavetes, where the killing was to balance a huge gambling dept to the mafia. What are the stakes in your story? She must kill a fellow studentRead more
The only movie that comes to my mind when I hear about a protagonist who MUST kill someone against their will is “The Killing of a Chinese Bookie” by John Cassavetes, where the killing was to balance a huge gambling dept to the mafia.
What are the stakes in your story? She must kill a fellow student or what? What’s stopping her from reporting the sorority as a crime organisation? Her autism? Is this realistic?
See lessUn fotógrafo, adicto a las carreras de galgos, se arruina. Su familia lo abandona, y él decide convertirse en mendigo en compañía de un galgo, aunque en realidad es una vieja bicicleta. Tendrá que expiar, sus errores del pasado.
Google Translator from Spanish to English: A photographer, addicted to greyhound racing, goes broke. His family abandons him, and he decides to become a beggar in the company of a greyhound, although in reality he is an old bicycle. He will have to atone for his past mistakes. I’m a Texan, but onlyRead more
Google Translator from Spanish to English:
A photographer, addicted to greyhound racing, goes broke. His family abandons him, and he decides to become a beggar in the company of a greyhound, although in reality he is an old bicycle. He will have to atone for his past mistakes.
I’m a Texan, but only know Spanglish 😉 I hope Google interpreted this correctly.
See lessDaniel ¿sabes Inglés?