1. Posted: July 10, 2020In:

    A bacheior must race against time to stop his apartment being invaded from a pair of talking cats.

    Mike Pedley Singularity

    So what is he doing to do about it? That's what the logline should tell us. For what it's worth, I like the idea of his depression being represented visually by these two talking cats. That's interesting!

    So what is he doing to do about it? That’s what the logline should tell us.

    For what it’s worth, I like the idea of his depression being represented visually by these two talking cats. That’s interesting!

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  2. Posted: July 5, 2020In:

    When a timid reef fish, discovers the world is about to be destroyed by a single ordinary human, he must find a way to stop them, and survive a treacherous journey to the surface world.

    Mike Pedley Singularity

    There's a few bits in this where I struggle to suspend my disbelief. I find it hard to believe that a single ordinary human can destroy the world. Without an explanation, I can't see how. Knowing that there's a plan for the fish to be aware of suggests the human is knowingly doing something to destrRead more

    There’s a few bits in this where I struggle to suspend my disbelief. I find it hard to believe that a single ordinary human can destroy the world. Without an explanation, I can’t see how. Knowing that there’s a plan for the fish to be aware of suggests the human is knowingly doing something to destroy the world. WHY??? This makes no sense to me.

    I also struggle to see how a fish is supposed to survive on land and stop a person doing anything. How did the fish even become aware of this? Did this human tell this fish his dastardly plan???

    I have way more questions than I should and I feel like the plot is so unbelievable (based on the information currently available in this logline) that I just dismiss the idea. It could be that the information in the logline is too vague, so you may need more specificity to clear up obvious and problematic questions the reader will have.

    Hope this helps.

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  3. Posted: July 3, 2020In:

    The world is about to be destroyed by none other than an ordinary human, and the only one who knows about it is an unwillingly chosen fish.

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    Philippe Le Miere Logliner

    If this were my logline, I'd focus more on character 'Fish'. "unwillingly chosen" implies a character of meek traits - just as Nemo was also unwillingly chosen. Theme feels to be embracing an environmental message: "Man unwittingly destroying earth/sea". A quick sketch logline for Nemo may read: "WhRead more

    If this were my logline, I’d focus more on character ‘Fish’. “unwillingly chosen” implies a character of meek traits – just as Nemo was also unwillingly chosen.
    Theme feels to be embracing an environmental message: “Man unwittingly destroying earth/sea”.

    A quick sketch logline for Nemo may read: “When [an overly cautious clown fish], [discovers this son has been captured by deep sea divers], he must [save his son, and escape the dangers of a dentist’s fish tank]

    “Dentist’s fish tank” maybe replaced with “ordinary human destruction” …

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