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As Richiev has stated, this is simply the set up. You don't need to tell us the character's world has been turned upside down - in any story that's what the inciting incident does - it's a given. What you do need to tell us though is what she intends to do about it. She can't change history so whatRead more
As Richiev has stated, this is simply the set up. You don’t need to tell us the character’s world has been turned upside down – in any story that’s what the inciting incident does – it’s a given. What you do need to tell us though is what she intends to do about it. She can’t change history so what does she decide to do in order to deal with her family’s past? Think visually too – film is a visual medium after all – what does her journey look like on screen.
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See lessWhen two siblings piece together the truth behind the ?Here be dragons? symbols on medieval maps, and learn of the possible existence of the last remaining dragon, powerful opposing forces converge in a see-sawing battle of wits, steel, meerkats, and witty repartee.
I agree with all said. If I may add something unsaid, this would be a question about the duality of protagonism. Why do we have two protagonists? If this is a buddy- (or sibling-) movie, I need to get a hint of the chemistry or tension between the two protagonists. Just a hint. Otherwise, why not onRead more
I agree with all said.
If I may add something unsaid, this would be a question about the duality of protagonism. Why do we have two protagonists? If this is a buddy- (or sibling-) movie, I need to get a hint of the chemistry or tension between the two protagonists. Just a hint.
Otherwise, why not one? Or a whole group? (Like Goonies.)
See lessBeing mocked for his frequent hemorrhoids, a frustrated teenager forms a group with elderly patients to protest and make people sympathetic towards them.
Perhaps change it from elderly patients to elderly sufferers or even "the haemorrhoidic?elderly".Since anyone at any age can get haemorrhoids (although it's more common in older age), couldn't it be a "forms a support group of fellow sufferers..."If the aim of the protagonist is to raise awareness aRead more
Perhaps change it from elderly patients to elderly sufferers or even “the haemorrhoidic?elderly”.
Since anyone at any age can get haemorrhoids (although it’s more common in older age), couldn’t it be a “forms a support group of fellow sufferers…”
If the aim of the protagonist is to raise awareness about haemorrhoids and make them more accepted in society then surely having a diverse group of sufferers will say a lot more than a group of the stereotypical elderly sufferers.
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