1. Posted: August 30, 2016In:

    Keira, a warrior just shy of her sixteenth birthday, will have to survive the creatures of a world twisted by the DNA Wars, and hope her own mutation doesn’t degenerate further as she tries to reach the City of Lights where she will be free from persecution.

    mateekaq Penpusher

    I think you have a very unique idea! Sounds like a rich conflict. I would agree with the comments above on what could help make this logline better.

    I think you have a very unique idea! Sounds like a rich conflict. I would agree with the comments above on what could help make this logline better.

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  2. Posted: August 29, 2016In:

    Slated for Banishment on her sixteenth birthday, a young warrior must elude capture, rescue her best friend and hope her own twist doesn?t mutate further in the process. If they do manage to escape, Keira will have to face her nightmares, the creatures of a world twisted by the DNA Wars, and survive long enough to reach the City of Lights where she will be free from persecution.

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    Her own twist? Leave world-building for the actual screenplay and try focusing just on the core story and protagonist and you will find your word count will drop dramatically. Hope this helps.

    Her own twist? Leave world-building for the actual screenplay and try focusing just on the core story and protagonist and you will find your word count will drop dramatically. Hope this helps.

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  3. Posted: August 27, 2016In:

    In the future, all mental Illness is illegal. After a teen?s girlfriend is taken away due to early detection of a mental defect, he searches to find an error with the brain scanning machine but uncovers a dark secret.

    dpg Singularity

    What Nir Shelter said. ?What become his objective goal when he finds the error? ?What must he do about it?

    What Nir Shelter said. ?What become his objective goal when he finds the error? ?What must he do about it?

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