1. Posted: June 10, 2022In:

    Bloodlust

    lullabyoliveira Penpusher

    Aphrodite dies, after a strange disease. Mike travels to get the relic, an old man steals the piece of the cross to Mike. The relic is placed in the heart of Aphrodite, in a ritual, Aphrodite back to life, when she sees that she is in a chapel, she runs to out, yelling, she does not support the sacrRead more

    Aphrodite dies, after a strange disease.
    Mike travels to get the relic, an old man steals the piece of the cross to Mike.
    The relic is placed in the heart of Aphrodite, in a ritual, Aphrodite back to life, when she sees that she is in a chapel, she runs to out, yelling, she does not support the sacred place.All people think, is strange, the new behavior of Aphrodite, sleeps by day and night, she goes out.

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  2. Posted: June 1, 2022In:

    After her daughter dies unexpectedly, a toy maker decides to turn her into a robot doll that becomes a serial killer.

    Richiev Singularity

    This concept might be a little too close to Childs Play (Chucky) Chucky used magic, and you use robotics, but both are just ways to get past the first 10 pages and into the story about a rampaging serial killer doll. That doesn't mean this can't work, it just needs that one extra thing to set the stRead more

    This concept might be a little too close to Childs Play (Chucky)

    Chucky used magic, and you use robotics, but both are just ways to get past the first 10 pages and into the story about a rampaging serial killer doll.

    That doesn’t mean this can’t work, it just needs that one extra thing to set the story apart. like for instance perhaps the doll is actually protecting the father from something.

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  3. Posted: March 14, 2022In:

    While reading an old book of century old Indian rituals, a non-believer and arrogant millennial guy performs a ritual in which a person can leave the physical dimension of human existence, and loses his body. As he doesn’t get to read the next pages of getting back to his body, he gets stuck in other dimension. His family considers him dead. He has only 14 hours to get back to get back his body before it gets cremated.

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    Philippe Le Miere Logliner

    "a non-believer and arrogant millennial guy " = protagonist "performs a ritual and loses his body" = inciting incident he must ... "get his body back before it gets cremated" = main character goal If this were my logline, I'd ask why an arrogant, non-believer was reading centuries old Indian ritualsRead more

    “a non-believer and arrogant millennial guy ” = protagonist
    “performs a ritual and loses his body” = inciting incident
    he must … “get his body back before it gets cremated” = main character goal

    If this were my logline, I’d ask why an arrogant, non-believer was reading centuries old Indian rituals in the first place? While fiction is, well … not reality, it does model itself on the stuff of life, making plausibility an important criteria to consider. Most storytelling does well when it introduces a likable, albeit fundamentally flawed character. Arrogance is our hero’s flaw, but what might be their positive traits, their skill or something special?

    If arrogance is his flaw, then the character arc might be to transform into a selfless person. In what way might the story conflict facilitate this transformation? While, yes, he wants his body back (still all about his needs, and affirming his arrogance), what magic puzzle, troll at the gate, secret password must he solve to win it back? Think maybe Dorothy, who in order to get back home (to get back something she lost), she must kill the Wicked Witch, and get her broom back to the Wizard …

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