1. Posted: April 1, 2017In:

    In a nuclear post apocalyptic world, a group of human survivors receive a distress signal coming from a nuclear bomb shelter and they set out on a rescue mission, only to discover an unimaginable horror inside.

    [Deleted User]

    I think Richiev's modification is a step in the right direction. ?But I think that "unimaginable horror" needs to be made, well, less unimaginable since a CGI crew is going to have to create a visual of the "horror". More to the point, ?we need to know exactly what the threat is that this "horror" pRead more

    I think Richiev’s modification is a step in the right direction. ?But I think that “unimaginable horror” needs to be made, well, less unimaginable since a CGI crew is going to have to create a visual of the “horror”.

    More to the point, ?we need to know exactly what the threat is that this “horror” poses to the survivors.

    A lot of people think tarantulas are horrible in appearance and find it unimaginable that anyone would want to keep them as pets. ?But appearances are deceiving; tarantulas pose no threat to humans and some people handle them as pets.

    So I suggest the logline be reworked to indicate what the jeopardy is, the threat this “horror” entails. ?Because that threat determines the objective goal, what the survivors must do… to continue to survive.

    fwiw

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  2. Posted: October 7, 2015In:

    When the hipster invasion drain the neighborhood of low-incomers, a wrecked ex-butcher rallies the rejects to hit back, only to find the hipsters drain people of blood too — HIPSTER VAMPIRES

    Fma Samurai

    With nowhere else to go, an out of work butcher in?East LA?rallies a group of disenfranchised tenants to take their?dilapidated apartment building back from a?growing infestation of?vampire hipsters

    With nowhere else to go, an out of work butcher in?East LA?rallies a group of disenfranchised tenants to take their?dilapidated apartment building back from a?growing infestation of?vampire hipsters

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  3. Posted: February 4, 2017In:

    While trying to aid a quadriplegic man with an alternative method, a blind music therapist accidentally materializes an unholy spirit from her patient?s troubled mind, and it?s up to them to fight against it.

    JM Logliner

    Thanks a lot for the feedback. It means a lot to me and it's really helpful. The issue about the characteristics of the demon is a dilemma I have as far as how it is presented. My idea is that the demon is only an pretext for a story that is more based on the characters. In fact, is more of a dark pRead more

    Thanks a lot for the feedback. It means a lot to me and it’s really helpful. The issue about the characteristics of the demon is a dilemma I have as far as how it is presented. My idea is that the demon is only an pretext for a story that is more based on the characters. In fact, is more of a dark presence than something material. But I guess this needs to be redefined so the story has a clear direction and the main idea of the logline becomes clearer. Cheers.

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