1. Posted: May 31, 2016In:

    A paranormal reporter hears rumours that some ghostly activity is happening at her former school. Being a skeptic, she heads out to defraud the rumours, only to discover that there is something eery happening everywhere in the school… except for the Janitor’s Room..

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    dpg Singularity

    Alas, this is another incomplete logline. ?It is incomplete because it sets up a situation and an inciting incident in the form of a discovery, but it fails to follow through to completion with an objective goal -- what the protagonist must do as a result of her discovery.A logline is not the same aRead more

    Alas, this is another incomplete logline. ?It is incomplete because it sets up a situation and an inciting incident in the form of a discovery, but it fails to follow through to completion with an objective goal — what the protagonist must do as a result of her discovery.

    A logline is not the same as s movie blurb or teaser where you leave the reader dangling without any clear cut idea of where the story is going. ?A logline targets a different audience, movie makers rather than movie viewers.

    The purpose of a blurb is to persuade movie viewers to invest $12-15 and 2 hours of their lives in your story. ?The purpose of a logline is to persuade movie makers to invest millions and 2 or more years of their lives in your story– they have more at stake and want to know more about specific elements: ?a clearly defined protagonist (with a flaw), a clearly defined objective goal, a clearly defined antagonist or obstacle, and serious stakes.

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  2. Posted: May 31, 2016In:

    Jared heads to an island town where his best friend has gone missing. As he runs through the town, he finds it deserted, except for the few survivors in hiding. At first he believes that the source of evil is beneath the central cathedral, but soon discovers that the demonic haunting is greater than he could have imagined

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    dpg Singularity

    >>>soon discovers that the demonic haunting is greater than he could have imaginedAnd then what? ?The logline sets up the situation and inciting incident for a plot. ?But it does not fulfill the primary mission of a logline which is to sketch a complete plot. ?A complete plot is one that ?eRead more

    >>>soon discovers that the demonic haunting is greater than he could have imagined

    And then what? ?The logline sets up the situation and inciting incident for a plot. ?But it does not fulfill the primary mission of a logline which is to sketch a complete plot. ?A complete plot is one that ?explicitly includes the protagonist’s objective goal, his game plan and at least implicitly includes the stakes.

    So, as a result of his discovery (and the usual practice is to not name ?fictional characters in loglines), what becomes the protagonist’s objective goal? ?What is the “or-else” — the stakes? ?What does he (personally) stand to lose if he fails?

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  3. Posted: May 25, 2016In:

    In a drought plagued future, a world weary scientist discovers water, unleashing an ancient evil that threatens the lives of her small community

    dpg Singularity

    As the others have said. ? The logline sets up a situation, but not a plot. ?What is the ancient evil and what is the threat it poses -- the ultimate stakes for the community? ?And what is the objective goal that arises from the threat it poses? ?What must the scientist do about what he has unwittinRead more

    As the others have said. ? The logline sets up a situation, but not a plot. ?What is the ancient evil and what is the threat it poses — the ultimate stakes for the community? ?And what is the objective goal that arises from the threat it poses? ?What must the scientist do about what he has unwittingly unleashed?

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