1. Posted: October 11, 2021In:

    Feeling abandoned by the world, a young man drops everything and goes away for a weekend camping trip. Things soon turn ugly when a cult family comes looking for some sacrifices for the unseen howling creatures lurking in the nearby woods.

    Odie Samurai

    Leaning towards: “An adrift young man must fight to survive a cannibalistic cult on a nightmare camping trip from hell” Add color: Who is this young man? I took liberties with your cult – what kind of cult are you referring to? What are these howling creatures? Is this a monster/werewolf flic? If soRead more

    Leaning towards:
    “An adrift young man must fight to survive a cannibalistic cult on a nightmare camping trip from hell”

    Add color:
    Who is this young man?
    I took liberties with your cult – what kind of cult are you referring to?
    What are these howling creatures? Is this a monster/werewolf flic? If so, focus your logline around this.

    Hope you find this constructive, keep going!

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  2. Posted: October 11, 2021In:

    When a group of urban explorers breaks into an abandoned quarantine station, their morbid curiosity turns into a night of survival against supernatural forces.

    JohnAlen2025 Penpusher

    I like it. The premise sounds promising. I would try to be more specific about how their lives are being threatened and what kind of supernatural forces they're dealing with.

    I like it. The premise sounds promising. I would try to be more specific about how their lives are being threatened and what kind of supernatural forces they’re dealing with.

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  3. Posted: October 7, 2021In:

    Following an unsettling incident on a night out, a young woman’s adverse reaction awakens an uncontrollable craving for human flesh.

    tschrack Penpusher

    I don't think you can withhold the story points here. What is the inciting incident, what is the adverse reaction and what happens if she can't control her craving for human flesh? Maybe checkout the logline for Santa Clarita Diet and see if you could twist it into horror (if you are going for horroRead more

    I don’t think you can withhold the story points here. What is the inciting incident, what is the adverse reaction and what happens if she can’t control her craving for human flesh? Maybe checkout the logline for Santa Clarita Diet and see if you could twist it into horror (if you are going for horror of course).

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