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A disgruntled TV producer participate in a deadly game show at his workplace which is cursed with deadly spirits.
Interesting. Is he 'being on" it? It may sound stronger by saying "participating in". Is the producer cursed or the show? You may want to consider swapping "who" with "which". Sounds interesting.
Interesting. Is he ‘being on” it? It may sound stronger by saying “participating in”. Is the producer cursed or the show? You may want to consider swapping “who” with “which”. Sounds interesting.
See lessWhen a ghost hunter discovers a cursed hotel room, he must kill the ghost and stop others from being cursed.
Check out the movie "1408" from 2007. To help with the logline: 1. Expand on who this "man" is e.g. "A ghost hunter..." 2. If this is a hotel room, it's either being rented out or off-limits to the public, it not like a carved rock you “discover” in a forest - this is a known thing. So, give your prRead more
Check out the movie “1408” from 2007.
To help with the logline:
1. Expand on who this “man” is e.g. “A ghost hunter…”
2. If this is a hotel room, it’s either being rented out or off-limits to the public, it not like a carved rock you “discover” in a forest – this is a known thing. So, give your protag more intent “A ghost hunter investigates…”
3. IF this room was boarded up in a hotel and someone broke in to test the spirits, then this could be your inciting incident.
4. Now, what is his goal? So, he gets in – then what? What is the purpose of all this?
While thinking about your story and other stories like this, something came to me. What if your protag was a depressed or disgraced ghost hunter/parapsychologist that breaks into a room that is known to kill people to commit suicide hoping to capture the event as their final memoir – BUT discovers a reason to live.
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See lessAfter her brother’s death, a college student must track down someone who created a deadly video streaming online who kills anyone who watches it.
Most of your loglines have the same issue. They are simply an inciting incident. That's it! It's incredibly frustrating to constantly write the same feedback over and over without it ever seemingly making any difference. If you want to learn, then great, let's learn together as a community of loglinRead more
Most of your loglines have the same issue. They are simply an inciting incident. That’s it!
It’s incredibly frustrating to constantly write the same feedback over and over without it ever seemingly making any difference. If you want to learn, then great, let’s learn together as a community of logliners. If you don’t want to learn, then expect people to stop reviewing and you’re on your own.
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