1. Posted: June 25, 2019In:

    a young Hispanic man finds himself thrust into a nightmare when he begins working at a secluded orchard owned by an eccentric elderly couple, who plan on sacrificing him to their dark tree god.

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    Okay, as long as the black tree fits in your allegorical scheme.? Like,? the tree of death in the fields of agribusiness as the antithesis to the tree of life in the garden of Eden.? Whatever.?(And maybe the bad seed was the result of a GMO mutation.)

    Okay, as long as the black tree fits in your allegorical scheme.? Like,? the tree of death in the fields of agribusiness as the antithesis to the tree of life in the garden of Eden.? Whatever.

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    (And maybe the bad seed was the result of a GMO mutation.)

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  2. Posted: June 17, 2019In:

    When a troubled hospice nurse accepts a new job caring for a mysterious couple?s granddaughter on their rural plantation, she must protect her young patient from a violent attacker bent on revenge.

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    Actually,? I think? "on her rural plantation"? can be cut.? The particular setting is extraneous to the logline. What isn't extraneous and needs more particularity is what constitutes the "evil intentions".? There are so many? ways people can behave with "evil intentions" -- which one applies to thiRead more

    Actually,? I think? “on her rural plantation”? can be cut.? The particular setting is extraneous to the logline.

    What isn’t extraneous and needs more particularity is what constitutes the “evil intentions”.? There are so many? ways people can behave with “evil intentions” — which one applies to this story?? Is she going to be offered up in a ritual sacrifice?? And isn’t the initial attack, the inciting incident,? a kidnapping?? If so,? that is how the incident should be described.

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  3. Posted: June 17, 2019In:

    A modest girl is pressured by her overbearing mother into partaking in a dangerous aging experiment that could benefit humanity and please her mother but ruin the girl?s life as she knows it. Now, the girl must learn to cope and escape this newfound nightmare.

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    >>>As far as the doctors are aware the child was completely on board and that it was her idea. I suggest you do some research on contemporary medical ethics.? Only an immoral physician would suggest or consent to experimenting on a minor with a risky procedure that radically alters human maRead more

    >>>As far as the doctors are aware the child was completely on board and that it was her idea.

    I suggest you do some research on contemporary medical ethics.? Only an immoral physician would suggest or consent to experimenting on a minor with a risky procedure that radically alters human maturation .? And immoral physicians, willing to cut corners, violate their Socratic oath do exist. So…

    Just saying the mom needs an equally immoral and vanglorious co-conspirator.

    fwiw

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