1. Posted: February 21, 2018In:

    When a building closes up for the night, locking an ordinary employee inside, the employee finds a beautiful woman that turns his night in a living horror and psychological terror in which he must survive the night to make it end.

    Leviathan Samurai

    I've taken the time and put all you questions into the logline while still keep everything intact (hopefully). So let's see how this one goes and appears. When a supervisor of a large dining facility is accidentally locked inside, the supervisor finds a woman who seems to know everything about him,Read more

    I’ve taken the time and put all you questions into the logline while still keep everything intact (hopefully).

    So let’s see how this one goes and appears.

    When a supervisor of a large dining facility is accidentally locked inside, the supervisor finds a woman who seems to know everything about him, including his deepest fear. Soon his night takes a turn for the worst nightmare of his life, in which the only way to survive it is to survive the night.

    Let’s see where that one goes.

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  2. Posted: February 22, 2018In:

    A young doctor tries an untested vaccine to save her brother?s life which results in a virus that destroys the world as we know it. She now has to lead a group of young survivors to safety. Trying to avoid a world of infected people and scavengers, while being hunted by something they?ve never seen before.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Or you could focus on the emotional level. After causing an world ending pandemic a doctor seeks redemption by trying to lead survivors to safety.

    Or you could focus on the emotional level.

    After causing an world ending pandemic a doctor seeks redemption by trying to lead survivors to safety.

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  3. Posted: February 21, 2018In:

    Desperate to repair and reunite his dysfunctional family, an idealistic young man brings them to an abandoned island mansion in an attempt to relive his nostalgic childhood vacations, only to discover it overrun by giant carnivorous slugs. (HORROR-COMEDY)

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    I have to admit, I love the "...carnivorous slugs..." - it's weird and original. Find a better description for the MC "...idealistic young man..." means very little in a logline. Give him a genuine flaw and preferably relevant profession such as; arrogant family psychologist. If his goal is to reuniRead more

    I have to admit, I love the “…carnivorous slugs…” – it’s weird and original. Find a better description for the MC “…idealistic young man…” means very little in a logline. Give him a genuine flaw and preferably relevant profession such as; arrogant family psychologist.

    If his goal is to reunite the family, make the inciting incident something that relates directly to that. How about; after his parents divorce or after his estranged father returns home.

    I think this has potential, and with a few changes, the logline could read very well.

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