1. Posted: June 19, 2017In:

    A troubled South African teenager learns the true meaning of prayer when he confronts a TOKOLOSHE. (16)

    Billy14 Samurai

    I knew there would be that issue with the tokoloshe. So +2 words lol So, yeah, this is the story that's been driving me nuts for years now. So many things about it that I just can't get sounding right. That's why I decided to get the logline right first. There's no point in me talking more about theRead more

    I knew there would be that issue with the tokoloshe. So +2 words lol

    So, yeah, this is the story that’s been driving me nuts for years now. So many things about it that I just can’t get sounding right. That’s why I decided to get the logline right first.

    There’s no point in me talking more about the story really. I just have to get the logline right. If the logline works then I can finally start writing again and get this thing out of me. It really is killing me lol

    I’ll have a another version here soon. Thanks for the communication.

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  2. Posted: June 16, 2017In:

    When his medication stops working, a divorced writer must relive the inception of his MYSTERIOUS ILLNESS to remember how he stopped it as a child. (26)

    Neer Shelter Singularity

    The concept is unclear. The logline raises too many questions, not through intrigue but confusion. What does mysterious illness mean? What are the symptoms? Is this a mental condition? How does it manifest itself?? How will he relive the inception of his condition? Where there no other people aroundRead more

    The concept is unclear. The logline raises too many questions, not through intrigue but confusion.
    What does mysterious illness mean? What are the symptoms? Is this a mental condition? How does it manifest itself?? How will he relive the inception of his condition? Where there no other people around him that remembered what he did as a kid to stop the illness?? If he did it as a kid why does he need to re live it again instead of fighting it as an adult? Is his goal to cure himself or something else?

    Lastly, it sounds like most of the antagonistic force and MC actions are internal, in other words, it’s not cinematic what action does he take that will be visual?

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  3. Posted: June 17, 2017In:

    A writer suffering from a MYSTERIOUS ILLNESS must return to his childhood home to reenact the traumatic events that alleviate his symptoms.

    Billy14 Samurai

    Thanks for everything guys. I figured out my logline. There's also no point in me posting it here as the story is South Africa specific and only a South African director would go for it. You helped me figure that out. So that's me done with this logline. I'll be back with something new if my movie eRead more

    Thanks for everything guys. I figured out my logline. There’s also no point in me posting it here as the story is South Africa specific and only a South African director would go for it.

    You helped me figure that out.

    So that’s me done with this logline. I’ll be back with something new if my movie ever gets made.

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