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  1. Posted: September 23, 2017In: Noir

    After her rich husband and her lover are found murdered on her living room floor, a beautiful woman must prove her innocence to avoid being murdered by the police while in custody.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on September 27, 2017 at 4:43 pm

    I see 2 issues with the logline. 1. Mentioning on the living room floor in the logline. Not so important as to waste valuable space on. 2. The whole "in custody" part. If she was instead on the run and needing to prove her innocence or else "a crazy cop or two" may catch her and seek revenge, then wRead more

    I see 2 issues with the logline.

    1. Mentioning on the living room floor in the logline. Not so important as to waste valuable space on.

    2. The whole “in custody” part. If she was instead on the run and needing to prove her innocence or else “a crazy cop or two” may catch her and seek revenge, then we will still need to explain a damn good reason for that. IE, The Fugitive. She can break out of custody, sure, kinda like in the movie Salt, but I just don’t see where the story can exist in custody for very long.

    The blanket “by the police” sounds odd.

    The mention of the rich husband builds intrigue and the murders. As mentioned above, “beautiful” is too generic. Think of another element in the story that describes her.

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  2. Posted: September 23, 2017In: Noir

    Noir Dramedy: Attempts by a mentally unstable and displaced young couple to forge a family with a stolen baby are jeopardized by law enforcement, a relative with vested interest, and an abusive ex-lover; their only chance of success seems to be returning to their homeland.

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    1yzzy75 Logliner
    Added an answer on September 27, 2017 at 6:02 am

    Thank you. You have helped me clearly identify the theme to my script! I appreciate your opinion so much. I love the good old fashioned Individual Vs. Societal Norms stories.

    Thank you. You have helped me clearly identify the theme to my script! I appreciate your opinion so much. I love the good old fashioned Individual Vs. Societal Norms stories.

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  3. Posted: August 31, 2017In: Noir

    When an FBI agent is called to investigate the murder of a teenage girl, he is thrust into the underworld of a small wooded town in the Pacific Northwest. A surreal and introspective look into the corruption of the American Dream.

    Foxtrot25 Uberwriter
    Added an answer on August 31, 2017 at 11:41 pm

    Aren't they remaking it, or has that been a bust?

    Aren’t they remaking it, or has that been a bust?

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