1. Posted: November 30, 2016In:

    A domesticated soldier must rekindle her killer instinct by a suicidal Drill Sergeant in order to assassinate her drug trafficking ex-husband before he’s elected President.

    Roberto Alto Logliner

    It sounds intriguing, but too much information. If you could only describe each person with one adjective describing good, moderate, or bad behavior , how would you do this? This is a good excercise to get at the core of power dynamics.

    It sounds intriguing, but too much information. If you could only describe each person with one adjective describing good, moderate, or bad behavior , how would you do this? This is a good excercise to get at the core of power dynamics.

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  2. Posted: August 16, 2017In:

    When an emo-themed magazine is accused of causing a rash of suicides among young girls, a new editor is hired to change its editorial direction. Before starting, the new editor decides to dig deeper into the past editor?s affairs and discovers that an inmate, who believes she was wrongly accused of murder by the neighbor?s babysitter, was controlling the magazine from prison.

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    Richiev Singularity

    You seemed to have placed the inciting incident at the end of your logline. When she discovers her magazine is secretly controlled by notorious inmate, a newly hired editor must... (Do this) if she is to (Stop this)

    You seemed to have placed the inciting incident at the end of your logline.

    When she discovers her magazine is secretly controlled by notorious inmate, a newly hired editor must… (Do this) if she is to (Stop this)

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  3. Posted: July 15, 2017In:

    On a morning jog a woman stumbles upon a dead body, afterward she is visited by spirits prompting her to dig into the past to uncover the sins of the town saints.

    Richiev Singularity

    Is their any relation between the lead character and the deceased? That would actually help the story if it was personal to the lead.

    Is their any relation between the lead character and the deceased? That would actually help the story if it was personal to the lead.

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