1. Posted: August 4, 2016In:

    When a shy guy uses his lighter for the first time while talking to a pretty girl at a house party with dim lighting and strong winds outside the house, he must make a choice: is it lit, or isn’t it?

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    This is very vague, even if it was a logline for a short film or scene tell the story. Why would he have to make the choice? What does the girl have to do with the lighter and why is he using his lighter? If it's windy outside, what is the relation to the lighter?inside? It's all very disconnected.

    This is very vague, even if it was a logline for a short film or scene tell the story. Why would he have to make the choice? What does the girl have to do with the lighter and why is he using his lighter? If it’s windy outside, what is the relation to the lighter?inside? It’s all very disconnected.

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  2. Posted: June 17, 2016In:

    The story about a detective, whose case about murder of a little girl was stopped by Police chief because suspect was a New York’s most dangerous and powerful political figure, he is starting his own game, but when he finds out that she is his daughter from ex-wife which had left him few years ago, he becomes an unstoppable nightmare for suspect.

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    Hello, it seems to me that you are giving us?a vague idea of what the movie will be about before writing a proper logline - this a is stage in a process and it's ok, now it's time to take the next step and yes, the training section could help. About your concept, I feel like you're focusing a lot abRead more

    Hello,
    it seems to me that you are giving us?a vague idea of what the movie will be about before writing a proper logline – this a is stage in a process and it’s ok, now it’s time to take the next step and yes, the training section could help.
    About your concept, I feel like you’re focusing a lot about the context, maybe you should think more about the action.

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  3. Posted: April 6, 2016In:

    A serial killer taxi driver takes revenge on behalf of victimised passengers while trying to avoid detection.

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    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    FFF the simple is always the best. ?His motivation is to do gods work. ?But thinks on your version. His sin that he is atoning for could be the trigger of his own insanity. nice work.... Thank you.

    FFF the simple is always the best. ?His motivation is to do gods work. ?But thinks on your version. His sin that he is atoning for could be the trigger of his own insanity.

    nice work…. Thank you.

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