1. Posted: May 18, 2022In:

    An introverted young man is hesitant to take part in Faroe Islands’ biggest party day, Òlavsøka, until two free spirits take him under their wing for a social adventure.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Tjmohr, How about something like this? Hesitant to participate in social adventures, an introverted young man is encouraged by two free spirits to attend an island's mega party. I hope this helps.

    Hi Tjmohr,
    How about something like this?

    Hesitant to participate in social adventures, an introverted young man is encouraged by two free spirits to attend an island’s mega party.

    I hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: May 23, 2022In:

    With the death of his father, Leon Walsh is suddenly the new leader of his families smuggling business. But with a Cartel closing in and his five siblings wanting out, Leon must decide if a war with his competitors is something his family can survive.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi ThoorMoreno, Have I understood the concept correctly? A man must decide whether his business can survive a war with a ruthless cartel after he inherits his family's smuggling business that his sibling wants no part in. I hope this helps.

    Hi ThoorMoreno,
    Have I understood the concept correctly?

    A man must decide whether his business can survive a war with a ruthless cartel after he inherits his family’s smuggling business that his sibling wants no part in.

    I hope this helps.

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  3. Posted: July 5, 2022In:

    BRIGHT ORANGE BALL – POV Ball. After one of the best soccer players in the world passes over his first soccer ball must convince the legend’s grandson to take up soccer.

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    Odie Samurai

    Would I buy a book for my youngling based on your premise? Sure! But per your logline, the soccer player is the main character, not the ball. Who has to convince the grandson to play, the legend or the ball? Why does the grandson have to be persuaded - what are the stakes? For logline structure reseRead more

    Would I buy a book for my youngling based on your premise? Sure! But per your logline, the soccer player is the main character, not the ball. Who has to convince the grandson to play, the legend or the ball? Why does the grandson have to be persuaded – what are the stakes?

    For logline structure research, lookup movies like The Brave Little Toaster. That bright orange ball is your hook, and I can envision a bridge to becoming something better for both the ball and the player. Keep going! I hope you find this constructive.

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