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A billionaire gathers seven eccentric minds on an island to save democracy… the plan seemed to have limits, until it no longer did.
There's in intriguing hook in there, but I'm missing some critical elements. Check the notes elsewhere on this site to improve your logline: https://loglineit.com/howto
There’s in intriguing hook in there, but I’m missing some critical elements.
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As Judea fractures under Roman pressure, a paranoid client king orders mass slaughter to preserve power, while a meek couple suffers the brutal consequences of divine favor.
The logline juggles too many balls. An effective logline (one that makes an executive want to read the script) is succinct (30 words or less) and sells the sizzle, not the steak. What is the sizzle in your concept?
The logline juggles too many balls. An effective logline (one that makes an executive want to read the script) is succinct (30 words or less) and sells the sizzle, not the steak.
What is the sizzle in your concept?
See lessAfter a shootout results in the death of a rookie, a decorated patrolman is blamed and exiled to the dreaded midnight shift for six months to prove he still belongs on the force. But his chance at redemption slowly unravels when a bitter veteran-once a close ally, begins to suspect the ‘real’ truth behind the rookies murder and threatens to expose it- forcing the patrolman to take desperate measures to salvage his career.
What the logline needs is more clarity and specificity. What is the (inciting) incident that gives the cop a chance to redeem himself? And what is the concrete, specific action he takes to remove the blemish on his record?
What the logline needs is more clarity and specificity. What is the (inciting) incident that gives the cop a chance to redeem himself? And what is the concrete, specific action he takes to remove the blemish on his record?
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