1. Posted: March 5, 2026In:

    REVERSAL is when a newly widowed woman enters a retirement village and volunteers for a radical anti-aging trial, the treatment begins to work — splitting the community into rival factions and exposing how far people will go to escape decline.

    dogger Penpusher

    I think it is a promising premise, but it needs a tighter focus and more specificity. For example, she volunteers for an anti-aging *drug* trial. Also, a logline should begin where the plot begins, to wit, with the inciting incident. What kick starts the plot? When she enters a retirement community?Read more

    I think it is a promising premise, but it needs a tighter focus and more specificity.

    For example, she volunteers for an anti-aging *drug* trial.

    Also, a logline should begin where the plot begins, to wit, with the inciting incident. What kick starts the plot? When she enters a retirement community? I don’t think so. That’s setup, but I suggest it isn’t the inciting incident. The inciting incident is when the drug trial works. Complications ensue.

    Also, the logline should state the objective goal the protagonist has a result of the inciting incident. So, what becomes her specific objective goal as a result of the results of taking the anti-aging drug? What is the specific problem/challenge/ complication she faces? Again, be specific,

    Hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: February 20, 2026In:

    To pay off his debts, a former boxer addicted to gambling is coerced by his loan shark into carrying out an attack against a famous footballer just months before the World Cup.

    mariegreen Penpusher

    Got potential. Is there any aspect of your story that has a positive spin that could be worked into the logline ?

    Got potential. Is there any aspect of your story that has a positive spin that could be worked into the logline ?

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  3. Posted: February 19, 2026In:

    When her raw, tell-all article about her marriage goes viral, a struggling writer must navigate a toxic, public literary feud with her successful husband to finally achieve the fame and recognition she craves.

    Nick12 Penpusher

    Didn’t this script receive a mention on the Black List? Love how you took the premise and distilled everything down! 🙂

    Didn’t this script receive a mention on the Black List? Love how you took the premise and distilled everything down! 🙂

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