1. Posted: February 5, 2024In:

    Five young singers from New York took the pop music scene by storm in the 1990s as a boy band, but along the way, they learn the hard lesson about the price of fame.

    robgee9 Penpusher

    Sets up the stolry nicely, but for me does not get at the primary conflict -- are they poor and get spoiled by wealth; will they have relationshhip troubles; will they be taken advantage of by dishonest power brokers?

    Sets up the stolry nicely, but for me does not get at the primary conflict — are they poor and get spoiled by wealth; will they have relationshhip troubles; will they be taken advantage of by dishonest power brokers?

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  2. Posted: February 2, 2024In:

    When a 75 year old woman manage to hack into CIA, she´s hunted by the hardest cyber-cop you’ll ever find – her own son

    Odie Samurai

    Example: When a recipe search results in hacking the CIA, a 75-year-old woman is hunted by the world's toughest cybercop – her son. I hope you find this constructive.

    Example:
    When a recipe search results in hacking the CIA, a 75-year-old woman is hunted by the world’s toughest cybercop – her son.

    I hope you find this constructive.

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  3. Posted: February 2, 2024In:

    A German teenager craving social acceptance unexpectedly time-travels from 1914 to 1933 and must choose: find belonging in the Hitler Youth or break his daughter out of a prison camp.

    lukige_uk Penpusher

    A rewritten logline and elevator pitch. I'd love your feedback - particularly on its clarity and narrative potential.

    A rewritten logline and elevator pitch. I’d love your feedback – particularly on its clarity and narrative potential.

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