1. Posted: October 20, 2020In:

    A group of high school students’ carnival gone awry when aliens and zombies invade their town.

    Odie Samurai

    Party on! 😉 I simplified the baddies into one – easier for me to consume. Also, I envisioned an abduction scenario, and since most occur at night here you go: “A group of band geeks must survive the night when z-aliens begin to abduct their graduation house party guests” Take care.

    Party on! 😉
    I simplified the baddies into one – easier for me to consume. Also, I envisioned an abduction scenario, and since most occur at night here you go:
    “A group of band geeks must survive the night when z-aliens begin to abduct their graduation house party guests”

    Take care.

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  2. Posted: October 24, 2020In:

    With a near-bankrupt Gotham City descending into chaos in the wake of an unjustified police shooting, Lieutenant James Gordon is approached on behalf of a group of Gotham’s bankers to instigate a police-lead coup of Mayor Garcia’s administration and install leadership more favourable to the banker’s wishes so as to restore order to the city.

    Ninann22 Logliner

    Sorry, when I read the logline I was a bit confused. I got the first part, Gotham going bankrupt. Then bankers go to a lieutenant to stop a mayor? It’s a superhero movie, but where is the superhero? I read the summary that it’s based on a graphic novel. To me, it reads political drama. To make it moRead more

    Sorry, when I read the logline I was a bit confused. I got the first part, Gotham going bankrupt. Then bankers go to a lieutenant to stop a mayor? It’s a superhero movie, but where is the superhero? I read the summary that it’s based on a graphic novel. To me, it reads political drama. To make it more understandable Just concentrate on the main protagonist, the conflict, antagonist force( who is trying to stop the protagonist) and the main goal. Don’t use a person’s name in the logline. Just list the protagonist and a adjective that describes them. It needs some refining, but your goal is to have a logline that is simple, everyone gets it, and wants to read it. Keep up the hard work.

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  3. Posted: October 22, 2020In:

    Logline: A hardened cyber crimes analyst must shut down the source of a cursed smartphone app that seems to kill people who use it before the app strikes its next targets, her estranged family.

    Ninann22 Logliner

    I like the premise. It reminds me of the Ring. Just needs a little polish. When you have “ that seems to” take that out. In my opinion apps can be used on many devices so “smartphone” may be remove. I feel you run into more conflict that way which makes the story mor interesting. Keep up the hard woRead more

    I like the premise. It reminds me of the Ring. Just needs a little polish. When you have “ that seems to” take that out. In my opinion apps can be used on many devices so “smartphone” may be remove. I feel you run into more conflict that way which makes the story mor interesting. Keep up the hard work.

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