1. Posted: March 28, 2020In:

    On the verge of madness, a grieving man attacks his stubborn stepchild, chasing him onto private property, but when the psychotic landowner captures them he must learn to accept and work together with the boy to escape before they are both killed.

    dho1115 Logliner

    I assume the grieving man's madness is due to the fact he has to care for his stepchild? Here is another version of the logline you may want to consider: "A quick-tempered man and his stubborn stepchild must set aside their differences to escape when they find themselves being held hostage inside aRead more

    I assume the grieving man’s madness is due to the fact he has to care for his stepchild?

    Here is another version of the logline you may want to consider:

    “A quick-tempered man and his stubborn stepchild must set aside their differences to escape when they find themselves being held hostage inside a deranged psychopath’s secluded property”.

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  2. Posted: March 28, 2020In:

    A college student is plagued with premonitions of trying to stop a space shuttle explosion that might kill him and his friends.

    Tony Byrd Penpusher

    I kind of like this idea.

    I kind of like this idea.

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  3. Posted: March 20, 2020In:

    When a high priced gigolo moonlights as a pornstar, his sexual depravities reach extreme heights, and he is forced to decide how much of his soul he will sell for money, fame and the love that will never fulfil him.

    thedarkhorse Samurai

    Hi Richiev,Yeah - certainly, the logline is missing an I.I.Then something happens that makes him question his life choices.What story event makes the lead character look inward?I'm not entirely sure how sordid the sexual depravities gets. This is why I wasn't sure what is darker - the internet (beinRead more

    Hi Richiev,

    Yeah – certainly, the logline is missing an I.I.

    Then something happens that makes him question his life choices.

    What story event makes the lead character look inward?

    I’m not entirely sure how sordid the sexual depravities gets. This is why I wasn’t sure what is darker – the internet (being a pornstar) or being a gigolo (people are strange).

    Gigolo to pornstar (He goes from nobody… to somebody. he’s just a whore for the public. He’s doing things for the public. Things he doesn’t quite agree with. But he feels loved and he doesn’t want that feeling to go away.)

    Pornstar to gigolo. (He goes from macho/loved by many to doing dirty disgusting things with strangers. He thought the internet was a dark place – but the real world is far worse.)

    IMO – the internet is probably a far darker and sordid place ha.

    There’s certainly something universal here. A message about the Internet age/instant gratification/Facebook. I haven’t quite figured it out yet.

    Perhaps the solution is to have another character going in the reverse direction. A woman – a ying to his yang. We’ll see. Perhaps they fall in love. The love they’re both desperately searching for was right in front of them.

    Very very dark story – with a hopeful last minute.?

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