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A timid young woman, a former recluse, gets her dream job at a prestigious real estate agency and must compete with its cutthroat male agents.
Okay. Thanks guys. I'll think about this. I don't mean to shoehorn an agenda or anything. I just imagined a shy, sweet, soft spoken (yet flawed) young woman surrounded by testosterone-filled alpha males/veterans of their trade. (Two Days, One Night meets Glengarry Glen Ross.) Her arc is from shy, swRead more
Okay. Thanks guys. I’ll think about this.
I don’t mean to shoehorn an agenda or anything. I just imagined a shy, sweet, soft spoken (yet flawed) young woman surrounded by testosterone-filled alpha males/veterans of their trade. (Two Days, One Night meets Glengarry Glen Ross.)
Her arc is from shy, sweet, emotionally fragile to feisty, courageous, etc. She gets fired in the end for sticking to her beliefs and principles and being authentic. She loses and wins because she very much has become comfortable in the world and defeated a lot of demons.
Her backstory: she married a fraudster who used and abused her, after a divorce she became a recluse and didn’t trust anyone. She was afraid of the world.
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Agreed with the above. This is interesting. The concept needs conflict, and simply avoiding the enforcers doesn't sound very enticing. More to the point, what is his goal? Keep avoiding them? Until when? What's the endpoint? What if he decides to actively stop the system of death? This way you put hRead more
Agreed with the above. This is interesting.
The concept needs conflict, and simply avoiding the enforcers doesn’t sound very enticing. More to the point, what is his goal? Keep avoiding them? Until when? What’s the endpoint?
What if he decides to actively stop the system of death? This way you put him on a path to clash with the big scary folk.
How about:
See lessAfter avoiding his demise in a world of predetermined deaths, a man must fight the system that dictates when people’s time is up.
(REVISION #8) When a na?ve, rambunctious teenager muscles in on her sister?s singing career in 1963?s England, her dream of stardom fizzles out as she succumbs to the excesses of a Rock?n Roll lifestyle, ends up pregnant, and after a botched illegal abortion, has to re-evaluate her life to halt her downward spiral.
This is a wordier version of the same logline posted several drafts ago. Seeing as much of the same story problems still exist, I recommend you study the comments you got to date and reevaluate this concept on a fundamental level.
This is a wordier version of the same logline posted several drafts ago. Seeing as much of the same story problems still exist, I recommend you study the comments you got to date and reevaluate this concept on a fundamental level.
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