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After a zombie apocalypse occurs, which wipes out most of humanity, we see the lives and times of the Simmons family, through three different perspectives through time as everyone seems to die around Jack Simmons.
The moment we read "we see the..." especially followed by "lives and times" we indeed get the impression of reading a pitch for a TV show. It is too loose. Even if it were a TV show, you would still need to supply some tight plot premise. Also, omit any names. Instead, write a couple of words aboutRead more
The moment we read “we see the…” especially followed by “lives and times” we indeed get the impression of reading a pitch for a TV show. It is too loose. Even if it were a TV show, you would still need to supply some tight plot premise.
Also, omit any names. Instead, write a couple of words about what the character’s psychology is about.
I see that your premise is that people die around the main character. This doesn’t look like an important event, though, in the midst of a zombie apocalypse. That’s a part of the zombie (or horror) film convention: people die (and rise) all the time around everybody?especially the main character.
Unless it’s a comedy and the main character is an narcissist/egomaniac who thinks that everything revolves AROUND and happens TO him. But I don’t think this is your intention.
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Thanx. Saw the movie on YouTube . Nice.
Thanx. Saw the movie on YouTube . Nice.
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>>>I guess I see it more that these waking dreams, Recals, are a side effect of not sleeping as apposed to the drug.And that has happened in experiments where volunteers are deprived of sleep for days.? They start hallucinating; eventually their minds will automatically flip into R.E.M. modRead more
>>>I guess I see it more that these waking dreams, Recals, are a side effect of not sleeping as apposed to the drug.
And that has happened in experiments where volunteers are deprived of sleep for days.? They start hallucinating; eventually their minds will automatically flip into R.E.M. mode.? Because? R.E.M. sleep is how the brain edits the contents of short term memory, organizes and files what’s left into long term memory.
As I said earlier, I think the premise has interesting possibilities.? I suggest an alternate option might be to develop it as a film franchise.? Like the first film could be the origin story that sets up the premise and the story world, solves a dramatic question but leaves it open ended for further cases, further episodes. (Open ended in that the overarching problem of a 24/7/365 economic system that makes taking the drug a matter of Darwinian survival hasn’t been solved.)
Whatever. Best wishes with your writing.
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