1. Posted: September 11, 2022In:

    An independent inventor develops the first faster-than-light drive to take humanity to the stars, usurping a solar system of greedy corporations and vengeful governments.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Hallucigenia, Here's how I understood the story so far based on your loglines: A man invents a faster-than-light vehicle to transport humans to the stars and becomes a commercial threat to the government-supported corporation that wants him out no matter how. I hope this helps Good Luck

    Hi Hallucigenia,

    Here’s how I understood the story so far based on your loglines:

    A man invents a faster-than-light vehicle to transport humans to the stars and becomes a commercial threat to the government-supported corporation that wants him out no matter how.

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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  2. Posted: September 12, 2022In:

    Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian, a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi meme, I cannot see the relation between the two sentences in your logline. You wrote: Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian, and a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears. The second part of your logline can be an indeRead more

    Hi meme,

    I cannot see the relation between the two sentences in your logline.
    You wrote:

    Navigating the strained relationship she has with her older sister and sole guardian,

    and

    a teenager joins the improv group at school as a way to conquer her fears.

    The second part of your logline can be an independent logline by itself. Even if it needs more work:
    To conquer her fears, a teenager joins her school’s improv group.
    Use the above logline as a template and re-write if you think this logline serves the purpose.
    But I cannot see the significance of her strained relationship with her sole guardian.
    Can you clarify what do you exactly mean by “Navigating”?

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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  3. Posted: September 13, 2022In:

    Man who is facing bankruptcy, use his AI invention on gambled and accidentally become the best gamble in the world, although all the casinos and police are chasing after him, he keep doing it just to provide a better life for his family.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Zhuangrongzuo, This is how I see the story: "To elude bankruptcy and save his family from starvation, a man invents and utilizes the help of AI to win all his gambles in the casino, while trying hard to avoid getting caught." I hope this helps Good Luck

    Hi Zhuangrongzuo,

    This is how I see the story:

    “To elude bankruptcy and save his family from starvation, a man invents and utilizes the help of AI to win all his gambles in the casino, while trying hard to avoid getting caught.”

    I hope this helps
    Good Luck

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