1. Posted: September 5, 2022In:

    When a town is attacked by a bunch of pirates, a young blacksmith must take help by a drunken pirate to save the love of his life.

    Gabriella Werkander Penpusher

    You capture the essence very beautifully, and I like that you realised Will Turner is the protagonist. The only thing I might add is that Elizabeth getting kidnapped is written into the pirate attack.

    You capture the essence very beautifully, and I like that you realised Will Turner is the protagonist. The only thing I might add is that Elizabeth getting kidnapped is written into the pirate attack.

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  2. Posted: September 5, 2022In:

    An over-ambitious aspiring author must focus significant time on long neglected relationships to improve his mental wellbeing all whilst struggling to meet self-imposed deadlines for his debut novel.

    BenGilani Logliner

    Hi Lotcher, How about this: To help scope his ambitions and despite his efforts to meet all self-imposed deadlines, an aspiring author must take on non-fictional goals. I hope this helps

    Hi Lotcher,

    How about this:
    To help scope his ambitions and despite his efforts to meet all self-imposed deadlines, an aspiring author must take on non-fictional goals.

    I hope this helps

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  3. Posted: September 4, 2022In:

    After having a fallout with her bandmates, a pop singer leaves and becomes a solo artist in her own right.

    Joie9 Penpusher

    A bit wordy and confusing sentence structure and needs to address the conflict a bit more. Good premise tho

    A bit wordy and confusing sentence structure and needs to address the conflict a bit more. Good premise tho

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