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After becoming the sole survivor of his adventuring party a barbarian now protects the town’s children by slaying the monsters under their beds. But when a rise in monster attacks threatens everyone, he must overcome his survivor’s guilt and PTSD to save the town.
You might have to explain better where the PTSD comes from, but it's okay since we see who the protagonist is, what he does, the threat and his target. I would make it shorter.
You might have to explain better where the PTSD comes from, but it’s okay since we see who the protagonist is, what he does, the threat and his target. I would make it shorter.
See lessWhen a young video store clerk receives a proposition to make a snuff movie from a mysterious man, he decides to convince his friend to kidnap a girl and make the movie.
It’s definitely got potential, but here is a more concise version that I think captures the essence in fewer words: After a video store clerk receives a mysterious proposition to make a snuff movie, he convinces his friend to kidnap a girl in order to make it... I put the ellipses at the end becauseRead more
It’s definitely got potential, but here is a more concise version that I think captures the essence in fewer words:
After a video store clerk receives a mysterious proposition to make a snuff movie, he convinces his friend to kidnap a girl in order to make it…
I put the ellipses at the end because I think something could be added that maybe focuses in on the moral dilemma or the stakes a bit more.
For example, you could say something like “After a young video store clerk receives a mysterious proposition to make a snuff movie, he convinces his friend to kidnap a girl in order to make it, but things take an unexpected turn when they realize she’s a serial killer.”
That’s not perfect either as you ideally want to aim for a logline that’s 30 words or less, but hopefully that will get you on the right track! 🙂
See lessWhen the cinematographer of a documentary crew is pranked by a giggly Japanese salary man living under a bridge after the 2008 financial crash, she must fight for his story to be the new focus of the shoot.
I like it! It sounds like a dramedy or a mockumentary, but I could totally see this being a movie! 🙂
I like it! It sounds like a dramedy or a mockumentary, but I could totally see this being a movie! 🙂
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