1. Posted: February 14, 2024In:

    The richest man in the solar system wants to colonize the stars with his newly invented faster-than-light technology, but every power mad government and greedy corporation will stop at nothing to take it for themselves.

    Hallucigenia Penpusher

    Here's a rewrite: The richest man in the solar system wants to colonize the stars with his newly invented faster-than-light technology, but must fend off, fight, and negotiate with every power mad government and greedy corporation who will stop at nothing to take it for themselves.

    Here’s a rewrite:

    The richest man in the solar system wants to colonize the stars with his newly invented faster-than-light technology, but must fend off, fight, and negotiate with every power mad government and greedy corporation who will stop at nothing to take it for themselves.

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  2. Posted: January 1, 2024In:

    🔥💧EMPÍDOCLUS: The sands of time🌪️⛰️ – Movie {🐺}

    Odie Samurai

    Example: On a distant planet governed by elementals, an unlikely group of [masters] set out to defeat the corrupt fire… Honestly, the rest of the logline falls under the "Show, don't tell" rule.

    Example:
    On a distant planet governed by elementals, an unlikely group of [masters] set out to defeat the corrupt fire…

    Honestly, the rest of the logline falls under the “Show, don’t tell” rule.

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  3. Posted: January 2, 2024In:

    In a world where virtual prisons are considered humane, a female inmate discovers she’s part of an elite-driven psychological experiment, and must fight to maintain her sanity and avoid becoming a tool for societal control.

    Odie Samurai

    If the protagonist's mind is her prison, does she fight to expose the baddie experimenters to stop the maltreatment of inmates?

    If the protagonist’s mind is her prison, does she fight to expose the baddie experimenters to stop the maltreatment of inmates?

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