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A teen mysteriously cured of terminal cancer becomes the centerpiece of a war between supernatural factions that are hellbent on procuring a miraculous, prophetic pregnancy that grows inside of her.
Who is the protagonist? If not the girl you must decide who it will be. The information is all there but the order in which you present your logline could be better. Start with the prophetic pregnancy (inciting incident) and go to the outcome of it and the conflict stuff. By the way, who are these sRead more
Who is the protagonist? If not the girl you must decide who it will be.
See lessThe information is all there but the order in which you present your logline could be better. Start with the prophetic pregnancy (inciting incident) and go to the outcome of it and the conflict stuff. By the way, who are these supernatural factions?
When a lonely teenager, raised by intelligent machines, dreams they are lying about the extinction of humankind, he decides to run away on a perilous quest to find other humans.
RE:?I never said he lived in the outbackYou wrote in an earlier comment:? "...go south of Australia (he is near Lake Amadeus)."? So I assumed....Whatever, my general point stands:? the setting should confront him with insurmountable obstacles, life-threatening jeopardy from the git-go.
RE:?I never said he lived in the outback
You wrote in an earlier comment:? “…go south of Australia (he is near Lake Amadeus).”? So I assumed….
Whatever, my general point stands:? the setting should confront him with insurmountable obstacles, life-threatening jeopardy from the git-go.
See lessWhen her orbital city of New Delhi is destroyed, a spirited Indian girl escapes to Freedom city determined to join the space force and take down the evil prophet of New Babylon, who?s responsible for the loss of everyone she loved.?
Some stories are all plot, Misery for example. The characters don?t change and they have only physical and immediate needs. The logline you have tells me that?s this movie, which is great. But if it is more about character then A girl seeking revenge for the destruction of her planet .....
Some stories are all plot, Misery for example. The characters don?t change and they have only physical and immediate needs. The logline you have tells me that?s this movie, which is great.
But if it is more about character then
A girl seeking revenge for the destruction of her planet …..
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