1. Posted: January 4, 2018In:

    To counter a growing malevolence, a young woman in 16th century England, must embrace both her growing powers and her destiny to change the course of history.

    dpg Singularity

    >>> chooses to embrace the ancient power of the Wiccan wayHow does that translate into a specific objective goal?>>>to change the course of history.Specifically, how?? By doing what?And as Nir Shelter pointed out, how does the ascension of a new king serve as the inciting incident?Read more

    >>> chooses to embrace the ancient power of the Wiccan way

    How does that translate into a specific objective goal?

    >>>to change the course of history.

    Specifically, how?? By doing what?

    And as Nir Shelter pointed out, how does the ascension of a new king serve as the inciting incident?? How does that trigger her to… well, do whatever she’s gotta do to fulfill? her destiny, whatever that is?

    Alas, the revised logline still deals in generalities on key elements.? It doesn’t provide all information that a movie maker is looking for in a logline,? The? potentially interesting character still seems in search of a plot worthy of her calling (becoming a Wican).

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  2. Posted: December 28, 2017In:

    An reluctant bride is caught between her soon to be husband and her best friend who is intent on her becoming his bride by any means necessary.

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    The way it is written makes it seem - tone wise - like this other potential husband is going to kidnap her. I don?t think that is the case. Yep needs that hook, why is she deciding now? When an ex once thought dead returns on the night before her wedding... or when she is sent on assignment to writeRead more

    The way it is written makes it seem – tone wise – like this other potential husband is going to kidnap her. I don?t think that is the case. Yep needs that hook, why is she deciding now? When an ex once thought dead returns on the night before her wedding… or when she is sent on assignment to write a piece about the one that got away a week before her wedding…

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  3. Posted: December 21, 2017In:

    When a black high school football star mysteriously disappears, his four daring friends and their dog set out to find him, unraveling the sinister secrets of their town and the work of a serial killer.

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    Richiev Singularity

    "When their high school's star running back disappears, his best friends investigate, unraveling the dark secrets of their small town and a possible serial killer among the towns elite."Here

    “When their high school’s star running back disappears, his best friends investigate, unraveling the dark secrets of their small town and a possible serial killer among the towns elite.”Here

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