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After an elaborate conspiracy conducted to lure him in, a retrenched detective discovers a cult that promises him riches but the cult has more in store for him than what he bargained for. OR A desperate ex-cop joins a cult in order to save his family but the cult kidnaps his daughter for ‘slaughter’. He has to save her even if it means losing his own life.
A "retrenched detective" -- what does that mean? "...joins a cult in order to save his family..." ?-- save his family from what? And it's not the cult that ?kidnaps his daughter -- it would be the cult leader who orders his followers to kidnap her. ?The logline should clearly ID the antagonist. WhyRead more
A “retrenched detective” — what does that mean?
“…joins a cult in order to save his family…” ?– save his family from what?
And it’s not the cult that ?kidnaps his daughter — it would be the cult leader who orders his followers to kidnap her. ?The logline should clearly ID the antagonist.
Why does the cult leader want to kill the daughter?
I don’t understand what the motivation is for either the protagonist getting involved or the antagonist wanting to kill.
See lessThat psychedelic drug would be developed by the person who cooked it getting to the highest purity range In the planet,in/on each individual will be processed differently and this is what alarms the person because it’d mean the reality on this world that the consumer is expiriencing COULD change.An entity would change it,anentity that uses the connection that occurs when the receptors in the brain receive the substance molecule(which can be related to all psychedelic drugs known to mankind including “the god’s molecule”) as it’s path to communicate with the person(man or woman). thriller/enhancer/ introspective/suspense (don’t think about stealing it or filtering it…this entity will know…I AM THE OWNER).
Yunsa, Comparing what you wrote to just about all of the other examples on this page should at least set off an alarm that you're doing something really wrong as it pertains to loglines. Most just miss the story beats, you missed the entire drum.
Yunsa,
Comparing what you wrote to just about all of the other examples on this page should at least set off an alarm that you’re doing something really wrong as it pertains to loglines. Most just miss the story beats, you missed the entire drum.
See lessWhen a 20 year old girl inherits her family’s land surrounding a mysterious lake, she must fight developers to save both the lake and her alien boyfriend.
The pilot plot for "Breaking Bad" is a model for how to craft a logline and a storyline. ?The ?logline not only lays down the inciting incident and objective goal but also the stakes: ?he's doing it for the sake of his family -- not for himself. To make enough money for their welfare after he dies.Read more
The pilot plot for “Breaking Bad” is a model for how to craft a logline and a storyline. ?The ?logline not only lays down the inciting incident and objective goal but also the stakes: ?he’s doing it for the sake of his family — not for himself. To make enough money for their welfare after he dies.
So he’s doing an illegal, socially unacceptable act — cooking meth — which is dramatically justified by a socially acceptable motive, to provide for the future of his family.
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