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A detective struggles to solve his partner’s murder, stumbles upon other murders and indication it might have been an inside job carried out by dirty cops who are now hunting him.
Yeah, what's the hook? ?What makes this different, ?makes it stand out from the very crowded field of crime genre shows and movies?
Yeah, what’s the hook? ?What makes this different, ?makes it stand out from the very crowded field of crime genre shows and movies?
See lessA detective struggles to find his partner?s killer uncovers other murders and two dirty cops on his trail and the possibility it was an inside job.
Consider restructuring the logline so it starts with the inciting incident and finishes on a clear goal. You describe the MC's descovariesin the story but not the MC's actions and goals. Also, posibilities should be left out of a logline - either it was an inside job or it wasn't. Best to be more deRead more
Consider restructuring the logline so it starts with the inciting incident and finishes on a clear goal. You describe the MC’s descovariesin the story but not the MC’s actions and goals.
Also, posibilities should be left out of a logline – either it was an inside job or it wasn’t. Best to be more definitive with story elements in a logline than indicative.
For example:
See lessAfter his partner is killed, a detective uncovers a plot by dirty cops and must prove their guilt to stop another murder.
A detective struggles to solve his partner?s murder finds himself hunted by two dirty cops believing he?s closing in on them for their murders.
Captain, This reads a bit awkward, but probably won't take much to fix. I'd start here and add a detail or 2. A ?detective struggles to uncover that his partner's murder was an inside job carried out by his own co-workers. Good luck.
Captain,
This reads a bit awkward, but probably won’t take much to fix. I’d start here and add a detail or 2.
A ?detective struggles to uncover that his partner’s murder was an inside job carried out by his own co-workers.
Good luck.
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