1. Posted: November 8, 2015In:

    An ambitious woman takes over her uncle?s struggling restaurant, determined to bring the business back to life. When the staff that don?t meet Wendy?s standards begin to disappear, the remaining employees start to question just how dedicated to her job their new manager might be. You?d better hope you?re on next week?s roster.

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    Neer Shelter Singularity

    Hey Fliss If Wendy is killing innocent people, she becomes a negative character. If there are two other main characters trying to stop the killing, or figure out what is happening to their co workers, they are positive characters. The audience will find it hard to empathize with a negative characterRead more

    Hey Fliss

    If Wendy is killing innocent people, she becomes a negative character. If there are two other main characters trying to stop the killing, or figure out what is happening to their co workers, they are positive characters.

    The audience will find it hard to empathize with a negative character and easy to empathize with the positive ones. I suspect your plot would also be more interesting with an element of mystery introduced by the fact the main characters don’t know what is actually happening.

    Perhaps best to re draft the logline from the point of view of the character or characters that are trying to stop the killer.

    Hope this helps.

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  2. Posted: November 1, 2015In:

    In a world where the police can get a warrant to search your memories, a former cop is implanted with murderous false memories and must find a way to have them removed before he’s caught and his mind read.

    Knightrider Mentor

    Well, the way I have it down is he is trying to get out of the life and the way he feel into it was beyond his control, he'll be that guy who luck has just never gone his way and when he starts to take control it truly spirals out of control.

    Well, the way I have it down is he is trying to get out of the life and the way he feel into it was beyond his control, he’ll be that guy who luck has just never gone his way and when he starts to take control it truly spirals out of control.

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  3. Posted: November 2, 2015In:

    A misfit South African farmer, going through a existential crisis , finds companionship in a French, new age – hippie couple, but it transpires that they belong to a survivalist , narcissistic cult and plan to parasitically abuse the farmers resources to prepare for doomsday at all costs.

    dpg Singularity

    I presume that this is a variant, or and extended logline of the other.? One problem with this version is that? the doomsdayers seem to be in the driver's seat of the story, not the farmer.? If he's the protagonist then when he's faced with the threat they pose, what does he do?? What becomes his obRead more

    I presume that this is a variant, or and extended logline of the other.? One problem with this version is that? the doomsdayers seem to be in the driver’s seat of the story, not the farmer.? If he’s the protagonist then when he’s faced with the threat they pose, what does he do?? What becomes his objective goal?

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