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Alan SmitheePenpusher
Posted: November 14, 20202020-11-14T12:05:39+10:00 2020-11-14T12:05:39+10:00In: Drama

1. When domestic violence is unleashed on her 24 year old self, the social media-ite must defuse his assaults before she’s loved to death.

She couldn’t believe after partying the night away with her best friend then returning home to Jasper Derrik’s violent ass, that her life would end like this; aggravated!
What the judge and jury didn’t see was the fact that JD was full of party favors, again, when he literally slaps the night’s taste out of her mouth, again and her composing herself, again, enough to slit his throat from ear to ear, 40 minutes later, was a task.

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    1. Richiev Singularity
      2020-11-14T15:05:23+10:00Added an answer on November 14, 2020 at 3:05 pm

      I don’t know what you mean by, ‘defuse his assaults’?

      ‘Defuse his assaults’ would mean to lessen the severity of his assaults. Make them so they don’t hurt as much, so she can live with being assaulted.

      That seems like either a weird goal or a strange wording of the logline. (Probably the second)

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      “When her boyfriend assaults her after a night of partying, a Youtuber must…” (Then tell us what your lead must do)

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    2. Mike Pedley Singularity
      2020-11-15T20:49:33+10:00Added an answer on November 15, 2020 at 8:49 pm

      I am so confused. You’ve said that she “slit[s] his throat from ear to ear” but also that “her life would end like this”. So she’s dead but he’s also dead. So who’s the judge judging? Or did you mean “end UP like this”? That suggests she’s still alive. One word makes a huge difference!!!

      As Richiev said, what does “defuse his assaults” mean?

      “loved to death” if he assaults her, that’s not love!

      I’m trying to work out what this story is actually about (which is never a good thing), but I think it’s about a girl on trial for killing her boyfriend in self-defence after he assaulted her? Is that right?

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