Samurai
Posted: 2019-03-07T11:45:50+10:00 In:

2nd revision: A photographer with OCD battles her insecurities in a rare romance with a jovial woman who sees past her affliction.

2nd revision: A photographer with OCD battles her insecurities in a rare romance with a jovial woman who sees past her affliction.
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    1. Samurai

      Weird, I reviewed this on Thursday and now don’t see it…

      Agree.

      What is the conflict between them or against the pair?

      If the romance is the A Story, clarify the hook and what makes this special.

      Along with the above, what is more meaningful to say about the? woman than jovial?

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    2. Singularity

      Check out the “Our formula” tab to help with formatting.

      What’s this photographer’s goal? What does “battles her insecurities” look like onscreen? It’s not very visual and could take 5 mins could take 3 years. We need more!

      When she falls in love with a woman who sees past her condition, an obsessive-compulsive photographer must…. then tell us what she must do.

      Why a photographer? What does that bring to the table? If you’re choosing to reduce this character to her profession, her profession MUST be relevant to the story or at the very least tell us something interesting about the character.

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