When an overdosed addict falls into a coma, he must stop his past selves from using heroin to wake up before he dies.

Action? I feel this is more of a drama or thriller to be honest. It might be action, but it’s not clear from this logline where the action is coming from.

“Past selves” – plural? Surely, he just needs to stop one? He’s “Back to the Future” style time-travelling within his own head, right? Or is it more of a “if his current self can convince a past version of himself to quit he can wake up” kinda deal?

I like this idea, for what it’s worth. I think there’s definitely something worth exploring here. I can see him meeting himself before he takes his very first hit and trying to talk him out of it to no avail. Then he jumps forward to a difficult time in his life when he turns to the drug in a big way. He becomes his own guardian angel in a way and in turn convinces his current self he doesn’t want to do it anymore. I’d love it if the final act was the realisation that the only one he needs to convince is the one that’s in the coma in the present. Nice “you can’t live in the past” message.

I think it would be worth expanding on some of the elements in this logline so we understand what exactly is happening within this guy’s head. If you want to keep it as an action film too, maybe make it sound more like an action film.

It’s a Wonderful Life meets Trainspotting…. interesting!

Hope this helps.