A 45 year old homemaker finds herself on the verge of an ugly divorce. With her estranged relationships and a broken heart, she tumbles further down when is left bereft of an alimony. To leave behind rock bottom, she must discover herself and start a new life.
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A 45 year old homemaker finds herself on the verge of an ugly divorce. With her estranged relationships and a broken heart, she tumbles further down when is left bereft of an alimony. To leave behind rock bottom, she must discover herself and start a new life.
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You have listed plot points only. A logline would look something like this…
A middle-aged woman deals with divorce and a broken heart before seeking a new life of happiness.
And there is so much more you could include.
I hate to directly disagree with someone in a thread but I find Foxtrot25’s comments, which are often good advice, in this instance posing a risk of misleading a writer.
This is not a lits of plot points, rather a vague description of generic situations. There are no specific events, actions or objectives described all of which are necessary for a plot and plot points.
trijainerthi
Please consult the ‘Formula’ tab on the top bar.
Avoid vague descriptions such as “…she tumbles further down…” the reason being that this can mean any number of things – she becomes addicted to drugs, self harm, alienates freinds and family, becomes a criminal. The way in which she tumbles further down can dictate the tone and even genre, therefore the details of what she does are vital for the logline.
Focus your next drafts on the details of the plot instead of allegory and simile.
You spent about 40 words on set-up
Then when you write what the lead ?must do about these events you say she must, discover herself which is way to vague.
Give us a specific event, then tell us what the lead must do about it in a tangible way.
“Left destitute by her ex-husband, a homemaker must enter the workforce for the first time and learn to become self sufficient if she is to survive.”