Small Town Big Secrets
A Boston girl wanting to find her own accepts a teaching job in Idaho. After an intense need for her Principal to keep up with the mental and physical well being of a young student the teacher lets loose her curiosity and finds herself in a middle of a family break down. She must find a way to stay sane in the mix of extreme delusions and self realization that is threatening to tear one family apart.
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A logline should be about one specific goal that the protagonist needs to pursue. But this logline seems to present three goals: 1] “wanting to find her own”; 2]”Intense need… lets loose her curiosity”; 3]”must find a way to stay sane”.
And only the first one is proactive, one primarily of the protagonist’s choosing; the other two are reactive, in responses to the needs of other characters. And even though it may be proactive, the first goal is vague: what does “wanting to find her own” mean?
And why would another person’s delusions challenge the teacher’s sanity? (And I was unaware that “self-realization” was a psychological problem. I always thought it was a benign level near the top of Maslow’s hierarchy of needs.)
A rough log line… Thanks though
What about…. “A new teacher’s search for answers lead to a family who is on the verge of collapsing.”
Answers to what questions? Many questions may be raised in a story, but a logline is about ONE central question or problem that is raised around the end of the Act 1. A question that won’t be answered, a problem that won’t be resolved, until Act 3.
What is the question raised in your story by the end of Act 1 that won’t be answered until well into Act 3?
That’s easy…. The story is about a teacher who tries to find out why a principal is so paranoid about the well being of a girl and why she hates the little girls father.
that’s easy… A teacher tries to find out why her Principal is obsessed with a child and the child’s father.