A bunch of kid had bought a limited edition candy together but only one person can eat it,so they started a fighting competition to win that candy

Yuen497,

Much like your other posts, this one lacks an?inciting incident. A plot is a sequence of events and actions taken by a motivated character, the character’s motivation is established by the inciting incident but is currently missing from this logline. Another problem with this concept is the multiple protagonists, it’s best that you specify one main character for the story. Which one of the kids would be the main character?

Please read the ‘Rules’ section before posting again – you’re supposed to review two other loglines for every one you post, a rule you’ve neglected to abide by so far. As a result, any further posts will be deleted.? Other than that, I would guess that English is not your first language and suggest perhaps running the logline through a word processor for help with grammar and spelling. It would be very difficult for a producer to read past some of the rudimentary errors in this first attempt.